Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more structured and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence about the weather, then add specific details using linking words to make it coherent. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and improve sentence grammar for natural flow.

例: The weather where I live is quite beautiful throughout the year. For instance, during spring, I enjoy seeing the colorful flowers blooming near my apartment. Additionally, we experience all four seasons, which makes the climate diverse and interesting.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using better linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, try to avoid grammatical errors and make your sentences more concise and natural.

例: I prefer hot weather because I feel uncomfortable in the cold. Moreover, hot weather allows me to enjoy outdoor activities like sunbathing and going to the beach, whereas in winter, I tend to stay indoors.

提案: Focus on organizing your answer with clear topic sentences and supporting details linked logically. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity and naturalness.

例: I prefer dry weather because it allows me to go outside without worrying about rain or wearing rain boots. For example, during the rainy season here, it often rains continuously, which can be inconvenient.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, try to avoid grammatical mistakes and make your sentences concise and clear.

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every day because it can rain unexpectedly in my country. Therefore, before leaving home, I always check the forecast to prepare accordingly, such as carrying an umbrella.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly with better sentence structure and linking words. Provide specific examples and avoid repetition to make your answer more effective and natural.

例: In recent years, the weather has become very unpredictable due to climate change. For example, when I was a child in India, the weather was more stable, but now it can suddenly change from rain to sunshine, making it hard to predict.

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but can be improved by avoiding repetition and improving sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas and make your response more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates because traveling is my passion. Exploring new places allows me to experience diverse weather and cultures, which is something I dream of doing.

× Yeah, weather is beautiful where I live.

✓ Yeah, the weather is beautiful where I live.

In English, when talking about weather, we use the definite article 'the' before 'weather' because it is a specific concept known to both speaker and listener.

× I like the summer season, autumn season and even spring as well.

✓ I like the summer, autumn, and even spring seasons as well.

When listing multiple seasons, the plural form 'seasons' should be used to indicate more than one season.

× And in my country I almost see all the seasons every year.

✓ And in my country, I see almost all the seasons every year.

The sentence structure is awkward; 'almost' should come before 'all the seasons' and a comma is needed after 'country' for clarity.

× If for example recently there comes spring season and in spring there are so beautiful flowers near my apartment and I love.

✓ For example, recently the spring season has come, and in spring there are very beautiful flowers near my apartment, which I love.

The phrase 'there comes spring season' is incorrect; 'the spring season has come' is appropriate. Also, 'so beautiful' should be 'very beautiful' and the sentence needs to be completed properly.

× I always prefer hot weather because during cold I feel very upset and my body is not tolerate cold and in hot weather I feel so much comfortable.

✓ I always prefer hot weather because during cold weather I feel very upset and my body does not tolerate cold, and in hot weather I feel very comfortable.

The modal verb 'does not' is needed for third person singular 'body' with 'tolerate'. Also, 'during cold' should be 'during cold weather' and 'so much comfortable' should be 'very comfortable'.

× Wherever you want to go, you can go outside, you can take a sun bath, go to beaches.

✓ Wherever you want to go, you can go outside, take a sunbath, and go to the beach.

The phrase 'take a sun bath' is better as 'take a sunbath' (one word). Also, 'go to beaches' should be 'go to the beach' as a general statement.

× During winters we always stay at home.

✓ During winter, we always stay at home.

The word 'winter' is generally used in singular form when referring to the season in general.

× I prefer dry weather because in dry weather you can go outside, there is no rainy or no need to wear rain boots.

✓ I prefer dry weather because in dry weather you can go outside; there is no rain and no need to wear rain boots.

'There is no rainy' is incorrect; 'there is no rain' is correct. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two ideas.

× During wet weather, all the time there is rain.

✓ During wet weather, it rains all the time.

The phrase 'there is rain all the time' is better expressed as 'it rains all the time' for naturalness.

× For example, right now in my country there is rainy season and all the time we have to wear rain boots and everywhere water.

✓ For example, right now in my country, it is the rainy season and we have to wear rain boots all the time because there is water everywhere.

'There is rainy season' is incorrect; it should be 'it is the rainy season'. Also, 'everywhere water' should be 'water everywhere'.

× I don't like that hot dry weather is preferable for me.

✓ I don't like that; hot dry weather is preferable for me.

The sentence is a run-on and needs punctuation to separate two ideas properly.

× Yes, this is my habit to checking the weather forecast even every day because in my country there comes rain anytime.

✓ Yes, it is my habit to check the weather forecast every day because in my country rain can come anytime.

The phrase 'to checking' is incorrect; after 'to' the base form 'check' should be used. Also, 'there comes rain' is awkward; 'rain can come' is better.

× So before leaving home we must have to check the weather because it is more convenient.

✓ So before leaving home, we must check the weather because it is more convenient.

'Must have to' is incorrect; 'must' alone is sufficient to express necessity.

× Although when we go outside there comes rain anytime but still we have to take umbrella or some dry wind sheets with us.

✓ Although it can rain anytime when we go outside, we still have to take an umbrella or some dry windproof sheets with us.

The sentence structure is awkward; 'although' should introduce a subordinate clause properly. Also, 'there comes rain' is unnatural; 'it can rain' is better. 'Take umbrella' needs an article 'an umbrella'. 'Dry wind sheets' is unclear; 'dry windproof sheets' is more appropriate.

× Yes, in recent year weather changes a lot.

✓ Yes, in recent years, the weather has changed a lot.

'In recent year' should be plural 'years'. Also, present perfect tense 'has changed' is appropriate to describe recent changes.

× Climate, anytime it comes rain, it comes sun.

✓ The climate is unpredictable; sometimes it rains, sometimes the sun comes out.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Climate' needs a verb. 'Anytime it comes rain, it comes sun' is incorrect; better to say 'sometimes it rains, sometimes the sun comes out'.

× For example, before back in India when I was a kid, that time the weather is not sudden change.

✓ For example, back in India when I was a kid, the weather did not change suddenly.

'Is not sudden change' is incorrect; past tense 'did not change suddenly' is needed to match 'when I was a kid'.

× But nowadays it suddenly changes and we can't predict by ourselves.

✓ But nowadays, it changes suddenly and we can't predict it ourselves.

'Suddenly changes' is better as 'changes suddenly'. Also, 'predict by ourselves' should be 'predict it ourselves'.

× Yes, of course, even I would like to travel all over the world because traveling is my passion and I think we can learn a lot from travel.

✓ Yes, of course, I would like to travel all over the world because traveling is my passion and I think we can learn a lot from traveling.

'Even I would like' is awkward; 'I would like' is sufficient. 'Learn a lot from travel' should be 'learn a lot from traveling'.

× And yes of course when I get a chance to travel some another city or some another country, I can explore the country, I can feel the weather changes there and that is my biggest dream to travel in another.

✓ And yes, of course, when I get a chance to travel to another city or another country, I can explore the place, experience the weather changes there, and that is my biggest dream to travel abroad.

'Some another city' is incorrect; 'another city' is correct. 'Travel in another' is incomplete; 'travel abroad' or 'travel to another place' is better. Also, 'feel the weather changes' should be 'experience the weather changes'.