Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and linking words. For example, say 'The weather in my village is usually sunny during the summer season, but it changes to cold and rainy in the winter after four months.' This will make your answer more effective and easier to understand.

例: The weather in my village is usually sunny during the summer season, but it changes to cold and rainy in the winter after four months.

提案: Improve your answer by correcting grammar and using linking words to connect ideas. Also, be more specific about why you like hot weather. For example, say 'I prefer hot weather because schools are closed, so I can relax. Moreover, I often visit water parks with my friends, where we enjoy water rides and create unforgettable memories.'

例: I prefer hot weather because schools are closed, so I can relax. Moreover, I often visit water parks with my friends, where we enjoy water rides and create unforgettable memories.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and adding linking words. For example, say 'I prefer dry weather because I can complete all my outdoor activities easily. Also, I often visit small places like shops and restaurants with my friends during dry days.'

例: I prefer dry weather because I can complete all my outdoor activities easily. Also, I often visit small places like shops and restaurants with my friends during dry days.

提案: Try to organize your answer with clear sentences and linking words. For example, say 'I often check the weather forecast online, especially when I plan to go outside. However, I do not check it all the time.' This makes your answer more coherent and natural.

例: I often check the weather forecast online, especially when I plan to go outside. However, I do not check it all the time.

提案: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and completing your ideas. Use linking words to explain clearly. For example, say 'In my opinion, climate change has a strong effect on the Earth. Recently, global warming has increased because of the use of air conditioners, refrigerators, and other equipment that release greenhouse gases.'

例: In my opinion, climate change has a strong effect on the Earth. Recently, global warming has increased because of the use of air conditioners, refrigerators, and other equipment that release greenhouse gases.

提案: Make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and using linking words. For example, say 'No, I do not like visiting cities with different climates because I often feel ill and tired when I go there.'

例: No, I do not like visiting cities with different climates because I often feel ill and tired when I go there.

× The weather of my village is sunny because there is a summer season, but the weather change after the four months into the winter season.

✓ The weather in my village is sunny because there is a summer season, but the weather changes after four months into the winter season.

The phrase 'the weather change' is incorrect because the subject 'weather' requires the verb 'changes' in third person singular form. Also, 'the weather of my village' should be 'the weather in my village' to use the correct preposition. 'After the four months' should be 'after four months' without 'the'.

× I like to the hot weather because in the hot weather the schools will remain closed and I feel relaxed in that days.

✓ I like hot weather because in hot weather the schools remain closed and I feel relaxed on those days.

The phrase 'like to the hot weather' is incorrect; 'like hot weather' is correct without 'to the'. 'In that days' should be 'on those days' because 'days' is plural and the correct preposition for days is 'on'. Also, 'will remain' is changed to 'remain' to match habitual action in present tense.

× Many times I go to water parks with my friends, we enjoy water rides and make a unforgettable memories.

✓ Many times I go to water parks with my friends; we enjoy water rides and make unforgettable memories.

'A unforgettable memories' is incorrect because 'memories' is plural and should not have the article 'a'. The article 'a' is used with singular nouns only. Also, the sentence is better separated with a semicolon or period for clarity.

× I like to the dry weather. In dry weather I complete my all outdoor activities of the fields I go to. I go to small places like shops, restaurants with my friend.

✓ I like dry weather. In dry weather, I complete all my outdoor activities in the fields I go to. I go to small places like shops and restaurants with my friend.

'Like to the dry weather' should be 'like dry weather' without 'to the'. 'My all outdoor activities' should be 'all my outdoor activities' for correct adjective order. 'Of the fields I go to' is better as 'in the fields I go to' using correct preposition. Also, 'shops, restaurants with my friend' needs 'and' before 'restaurants' for correct conjunction.

× Many times I check the weather report online when I go, when I make a plan to go outside, mostly I check the weather from the Internet, but all time I don't check the weather.

✓ Many times I check the weather report online when I go out or when I make a plan to go outside. Mostly, I check the weather from the Internet, but I don't check it all the time.

The sentence is long and confusing; breaking it into two improves clarity. 'All time' should be 'all the time'. 'Check the weather from the Internet' is acceptable but 'check it' avoids repetition. Placement of 'mostly' at the start of the sentence is better for emphasis.

× In my opinion, the climate change are very effective on the earth because in recent years the global warming level is rising due to the air conditioner, refrigerators and other equipments.

✓ In my opinion, climate change is very effective on the earth because in recent years the global warming level has been rising due to air conditioners, refrigerators, and other equipment.

'Climate change' is singular and requires 'is' not 'are'. 'Air conditioner' should be plural 'air conditioners' to match the list. 'Equipments' is incorrect; 'equipment' is uncountable and does not take plural form. 'Has been rising' is better to indicate ongoing action in recent years.

× The climate of earth is a hot due to the.

✓ The climate of the earth is hot due to this.

The sentence is incomplete and incorrectly structured. 'A hot' is incorrect; 'hot' is an adjective and does not need 'a'. Adding 'the' before 'earth' is necessary. 'Due to the' is incomplete; adding 'this' or specifying the cause completes the sentence.

× No, I don't like to the visit other cities which cities are different from the different from the climate of my city.

✓ No, I don't like to visit other cities which have a different climate from my city.

'Like to the visit' should be 'like to visit' or better 'like visiting'. The phrase 'which cities are different from the different from the climate' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'which have a different climate from'.

× Because when I go to other city I become ill and feel tired in that cities.

✓ Because when I go to another city, I become ill and feel tired in those cities.

'Other city' should be 'another city' because 'city' is singular. 'That cities' should be 'those cities' to match plural and correct demonstrative pronoun.