Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Versuchen Sie, Füllwörter wie "uh" zu vermeiden und die Antwort klarer und präziser zu gestalten. Verwenden Sie außerdem verbindende Wörter, um die Sätze flüssiger zu machen.

例: The weather where I live is mostly hot, with a long summer and a short winter. Therefore, it is ideal for outdoor activities such as swimming in lakes or pools, and it also encourages me to exercise regularly.

提案: Vermeiden Sie Wiederholungen und Füllwörter, und strukturieren Sie die Antwort klar mit einem Hauptsatz und unterstützenden Details.

例: I prefer hot weather because sunlight energizes and motivates me to work. In contrast, cold winter days often make me feel tired and a bit depressed.

提案: Achten Sie auf Grammatik und Satzstruktur, vermeiden Sie Füllwörter und beenden Sie Sätze vollständig. Verwenden Sie verbindende Wörter für bessere Kohärenz.

例: I definitely prefer dry weather because rainy days prevent me from doing outdoor activities like cycling or jogging. In contrast, dry summer weather allows me to stay active and feel more energetic.

提案: Vermeiden Sie Füllwörter und Wiederholungen. Strukturieren Sie die Antwort klar und verwenden Sie verbindende Wörter, um die Antwort flüssiger zu machen.

例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast because the weather changes frequently where I live. I often use my phone to check the forecast, especially on sunny days.

提案: Vermeiden Sie Füllwörter und verbessern Sie die Grammatik. Verwenden Sie spezifischere Beispiele und verbinden Sie die Ideen logisch.

例: I believe deforestation contributes to climate change because many forests have been destroyed worldwide. This leads to extreme weather events such as tornadoes and heavy rainfall.

提案: Vermeiden Sie Füllwörter und unvollständige Sätze. Geben Sie konkrete Beispiele und erklären Sie Ihre Meinung klar und strukturiert.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with better weather than mine. For example, I want to go to a clean city with fresh air because living in a smoky environment can harm our health.

× And it's a great uh weather for doing exercise sometimes.

✓ And it's great weather for doing exercise sometimes.

In English, 'weather' is an uncountable noun and does not require the definite article 'a' before it. Using 'a' before 'weather' is incorrect. The correct form is 'great weather' without 'a'.

× when it's rainy day, I can go outside doing any activities like, uh, cycling or jogging,

✓ when it's a rainy day, I can go outside doing any activities like, uh, cycling or jogging,

The phrase 'rainy day' is singular and requires the indefinite article 'a' before it. Omitting 'a' before singular countable nouns is a common error. The correct phrase is 'a rainy day'.

× and it's makes me more energetic and, uh, boost my.

✓ and it makes me more energetic and, uh, boosts me.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' (not 'it's makes'). Also, 'boost' should be in the third person singular form 'boosts' to agree with the subject. The phrase 'boost my' is incomplete and should be corrected to 'boosts me' or 'boosts my energy'.

× because weather frequently change where, where I live

✓ because weather frequently changes where I live

The subject 'weather' is singular, so the verb should be in the third person singular form 'changes' instead of 'change'. This is a subject-verb agreement error.

× deforestation could be a reason of, to climate change

✓ deforestation could be a reason for climate change

The correct preposition to use with 'reason' in this context is 'for', not 'of' or 'to'. The phrase should be 'a reason for climate change'.

× and it's a reason of climate changing, causing tornado or, uh, so heavy rainfall.

✓ and it's a reason for climate change, causing tornadoes or, uh, heavy rainfall.

Again, 'reason for' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, 'climate changing' should be 'climate change' as a noun. 'Tornado' should be plural 'tornadoes' to match the context. The word 'so' before 'heavy rainfall' is unnecessary and should be removed.