Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to give a direct and clear description of the weather, avoid unnecessary words like 'resorts' and 'holidays' for seasons. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

例: The weather in Pakistan is mostly hot and dry from March to September, which is the summer season. After that, we have a short winter season that lasts for two or three months.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repeating 'winter season'. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary related to weather preferences.

例: I prefer cold weather because it creates a warm and cozy atmosphere, especially when I snuggle under heavy blankets. Moreover, I enjoy traditional dishes and dry fruits typical of winter. For example, we often gather around a bonfire, which makes the cold months more enjoyable and memorable.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured. To improve, try to use linking words like 'however' or 'in contrast' to make the comparison between dry and wet weather smoother. Also, avoid repeating 'people' too often.

例: I prefer dry weather because it is more comfortable and convenient for daily activities. For instance, during dry weather, travelling and working is easier without the worry of rain damaging houses, especially mud homes. However, heavy rainfall often causes problems like weak roofs and flooding, making life difficult for many.

提案: Your answer is detailed and relevant. To improve, avoid minor grammatical errors like 'an hospital' (should be 'a hospital') and try to use linking words such as 'therefore' or 'so' to connect ideas more naturally.

例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast every day because I work part-time in a hospital and need to prepare for rain. For example, if rain is predicted, I take my umbrella and raincoat the night before. I check the forecast on my phone using a weather app, which helps me plan my day better. Also, during occasions like Eid, I check the forecast to plan celebrations accordingly.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains some unclear phrases like 'very severe fun' and minor grammatical errors. Try to use precise vocabulary and correct grammar. Also, use linking words like 'consequently' to show cause and effect clearly.

例: In recent years, climate change in Pakistan has had severe effects. For example, heavy rainfall has caused flooding in many areas, displacing thousands of people. Consequently, many homes have been destroyed and daily life has been disrupted. This shows how climate change seriously affects both the environment and people's lives.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'sad scenery views' and 'famous but for'. Try to use correct prepositions and clearer vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I would definitely like to visit other cities in Pakistan with different climates from Punjab. Since Punjab is quite hot, I am interested in visiting northern areas like Swat, Malakand, and Kashmir, where the weather is colder and there is often snowfall. These places are famous for their breathtaking scenery and peaceful environment, making them perfect for relaxing holidays. I really love the beautiful views found in the north.

× The weather here resorts as I live in Pakistan and in most of the months here there is the summer season from almost March till September and after that we have two or three months holidays for winter season.

✓ The weather here is like this as I live in Pakistan and in most of the months here there is the summer season from almost March till September and after that we have two or three months holidays for winter season.

The verb 'resorts' is incorrectly used here. The correct verb to describe the weather condition is 'is like' or 'is'. 'Resorts' is a verb meaning to turn to or use something, which does not fit the context. Use 'is like' to describe the weather condition properly.

× after that we have two or three months holidays for winter season.

✓ after that we have two or three months of holidays for the winter season.

The phrase 'months holidays' is incorrect because 'months' is plural and 'holidays' is plural, but they need a preposition 'of' to connect them properly. Also, 'the winter season' requires the definite article 'the' to specify the season.

× I prefer cold weather because it creates a warm and cozy atmosphere, especially when I snuggle under the heavy blankets.

✓ I prefer cold weather because it creates a warm and cozy atmosphere, especially when I snuggle under heavy blankets.

The definite article 'the' before 'heavy blankets' is unnecessary unless referring to specific blankets already known. In general, when speaking about things in general, omit 'the'.

× I also enjoy the traditional dishes and dry fruits that are typical for winter season in our country.

✓ I also enjoy traditional dishes and dry fruits that are typical for the winter season in our country.

The definite article 'the' before 'traditional dishes' is unnecessary because it refers to dishes in general. However, 'the' is needed before 'winter season' to specify the particular season.

× For instance, we often gather around a bonfire, which makes the cold months even more enjoyable and memorable for me.

✓ For instance, we often gather around a bonfire, which makes cold months even more enjoyable and memorable for me.

The definite article 'the' before 'cold months' is unnecessary when speaking generally about cold months. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural.

× I prefer dry weather because it's more comfortable and convenient to perform daily activities.

✓ I prefer dry weather because it's more comfortable and convenient to perform daily activities.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically correct.

× For instance, during dry weather, people can easily travel and work without worrying about the rain, which damages their houses, especially those with mud homes.

✓ For instance, during dry weather, people can easily travel and work without worrying about rain, which damages their houses, especially those with mud homes.

The definite article 'the' before 'rain' is unnecessary when speaking about rain in general. Removing 'the' is more natural.

× On the other hand, heavy rainfall often causes problems like weak roofs and flooding, which makes life difficult for many people.

✓ On the other hand, heavy rainfall often causes problems like weak roofs and flooding, which make life difficult for many people.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to plural nouns 'weak roofs and flooding', so the verb should be plural 'make' instead of singular 'makes'.

× Yes, I usually check the weather forecast every day because I work part time in an hospital and I need to prepare myself in case of rains.

✓ Yes, I usually check the weather forecast every day because I work part time in a hospital and I need to prepare myself in case of rain.

The article 'an' before 'hospital' is incorrect because 'hospital' starts with a consonant sound, so 'a' is correct. Also, 'rains' is incorrect in this context; 'rain' is uncountable and should be used without 's'.

× For instance, if the forecast predicts rain, I make sure to take my umbrella and raincoat with me the night before.

✓ For instance, if the forecast predicts rain, I make sure to take my umbrella and raincoat with me the night before.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically correct.

× I usually check the forecast on my phone using a weather app which helps me to plan my day better.

✓ I usually check the forecast on my phone using a weather app which helps me plan my day better.

The phrase 'helps me to plan' is correct but 'helps me plan' is more natural and concise in English.

× And on different occasions like Eid, I also check the weather forecast because we have to celebrate it accordingly.

✓ On different occasions like Eid, I also check the weather forecast because we have to celebrate it accordingly.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and unnecessary here. Removing 'And' improves sentence structure.

× In recent years, the effects of climatic changes in Pakistan have been very severe fun.

✓ In recent years, the effects of climate change in Pakistan have been very severe.

The phrase 'climatic changes' is less common; 'climate change' is the standard term. Also, 'severe fun' is incorrect; 'severe' should not be followed by 'fun'. The word 'fun' is likely a mistake and should be removed.

× For example, heavy rainfall has caused flooding in many areas, which has covered large areas and displaced thousands of people.

✓ For example, heavy rainfall has caused flooding in many areas, which have covered large areas and displaced thousands of people.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to plural noun 'areas', so the verb should be plural 'have' instead of singular 'has'.

× As a result, in many, homes have been destroyed and daily activities have been greatly disrupted.

✓ As a result, in many homes, houses have been destroyed and daily activities have been greatly disrupted.

The phrase 'in many,' is incomplete and unclear. It should be 'in many homes' or 'in many places'. Also, 'homes' and 'houses' are similar; using 'houses' clarifies the meaning.

× This shows how climate changes is seriously affecting both the environmental and people's life.

✓ This shows how climate change is seriously affecting both the environment and people's lives.

'Climate changes' should be singular 'climate change'. 'Environmental' is an adjective; the noun 'environment' is correct here. 'People's life' should be plural 'people's lives'.

× Yes, I would definitely like to visit other cities in Pakistan that have different climate from Punjab.

✓ Yes, I would definitely like to visit other cities in Pakistan that have different climates from Punjab.

'Climate' should be plural 'climates' because it refers to different types of climate in multiple cities.

× Since Punjab is quite hot, I am interested in visiting the northern areas like Sawad, Malakand and Kashmir where the weather is much colder and there is often snowfall.

✓ Since Punjab is quite hot, I am interested in visiting northern areas like Swat, Malakand and Kashmir where the weather is much colder and there is often snowfall.

The definite article 'the' before 'northern areas' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Also, 'Sawad' is a misspelling; the correct name is 'Swat'.

× These places are famous but for the breathtaking scenery and peaceful environment which makes them perfect for relaxing holidays.

✓ These places are famous for their breathtaking scenery and peaceful environment, which makes them perfect for relaxing holidays.

The phrase 'famous but for' is incorrect; it should be 'famous for'. Also, 'which makes' correctly refers to singular 'environment' and 'scenery' as a collective idea.

× I really love sad scenery views as they are in northern.

✓ I really love the beautiful scenery views as they are in the north.

The adjective 'sad' is incorrect to describe scenery; 'beautiful' or 'breathtaking' is appropriate. Also, 'in northern' is incomplete; it should be 'in the north'. Adding 'the' before 'scenery views' is also correct.