Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to start your answer directly about the weather and avoid unrelated words like 'Tired'. Use clear and concise sentences, and add linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, mention the weather first, then explain why you prefer winter with specific reasons.

例: The weather in UAE is very hot and dry, especially during summer. Because of this, I prefer winter weather since it feels more comfortable and refreshing. Moreover, I enjoy the cozy atmosphere that winter brings, unlike the hot summer which makes me sweat and attracts mosquitoes.

提案: Your answer is good but try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and repeat ideas less. Use linking words to connect your points and provide more specific reasons why you like cold weather.

例: I prefer cold weather because I have never experienced snow living in the UAE. Cold weather makes me feel cozy, and I enjoy activities like drinking hot chocolate during winter. Therefore, I find cold climates more appealing than hot ones.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and try to explain your preference more clearly. Use linking words to contrast your opinion with others and give specific examples of what you like about wet weather.

例: I prefer wet weather because, unlike some people who find it uncomfortable, I enjoy the lively atmosphere it creates. For example, I like the sound of rain and the fresh smell after it rains, which makes the environment feel refreshing.

提案: Try to give a complete and clear answer without informal phrases like 'lazy' or 'I don't really wanna know'. Explain briefly why you don't check the forecast and how often you might do it if at all.

例: I usually do not check the weather forecast because I find it unnecessary for my daily routine. Occasionally, I might check it if I have plans that depend on the weather.

提案: Try to avoid unclear or incomplete sentences. Focus on giving a clear opinion about climate change effects with specific examples. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

例: Although I don't follow news about climate change closely, I have noticed that in the UAE, it has been hotter recently and there has been very little rain. This suggests that climate change might be causing more extreme weather conditions here.

提案: Avoid repeating the same idea multiple times. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details with linking words. Be specific about why you want to visit Canada and experience its climate.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Canada because it has a cold climate and snow, which I have never experienced living in the UAE. Experiencing winter there would be exciting and different from the hot weather I am used to.

× Tired.

✓ I am tired.

The sentence 'Tired.' lacks a verb and subject, making it incomplete. Adding 'I am' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× I prefer winter places since it's my place and I feel so comfort in winter.

✓ I prefer winter places since it's my favorite season and I feel so comfortable in winter.

The phrase 'feel so comfort' is incorrect; 'comfort' is a noun, but here an adjective 'comfortable' is needed. Also, 'my place' is unclear; 'my favorite season' clarifies the meaning.

× I don't like summer because it's so hot, makes me it makes me sweat and there's lots of mosquitoes.

✓ I don't like summer because it's so hot; it makes me sweat and there are lots of mosquitoes.

The sentence has a repeated phrase 'makes me it makes me sweat' which is redundant. Also, 'there's lots of mosquitoes' should be 'there are lots of mosquitoes' because 'mosquitoes' is plural.

× I prefer cold weather since I live in UAE where I don't really see uh or I don't really experience winter weather or snow.

✓ I prefer cold weather since I live in the UAE where I don't really see or experience winter weather or snow.

The article 'the' is needed before 'UAE' as it is a country name that requires it. Also, 'see uh or I don't really experience' is awkward; removing 'uh' and 'see' improves clarity.

× I would like to experience this and this weather because it's my vibe.

✓ I would like to experience this kind of weather because it's my vibe.

The phrase 'this and this weather' is unclear and redundant. Replacing it with 'this kind of weather' clarifies the meaning.

× I prefer wet weather, some people see it really uncomfortable and annoying while I see it really nice and it's full of actions.

✓ I prefer wet weather; some people find it really uncomfortable and annoying, while I find it really nice and full of activity.

The verb 'see' is incorrectly used to express opinion; 'find' is more appropriate. Also, 'full of actions' should be 'full of activity' for natural expression.

× Just like wet floors when it's rainy.

✓ I just like wet floors when it's rainy.

The original sentence is a fragment without a subject and verb. Adding 'I' and 'like' completes the sentence.

× No, I don't often check the weather because I am lazy too and I don't really have look, I don't really wanna know like.

✓ No, I don't often check the weather because I am lazy, and I don't really want to know.

The phrase 'I don't really have look' is incorrect and unclear. Also, 'wanna' is informal; 'want to' is preferred. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× I live in new EI don't really and I don't really know what's going on outside.

✓ I live in New [City], and I don't really know what's going on outside.

The phrase 'new EI don't really' is unclear and seems to be a transcription error. Assuming 'New [City]' is intended, the sentence is corrected accordingly.

× It's 'cause I'm not that type of person that likes to to check about the weather or what's going on in life.

✓ It's because I'm not the type of person who likes to check the weather or what's going on in life.

The phrase 'check about the weather' is incorrect; 'check the weather' is correct. Also, 'that likes' should be 'who likes' when referring to people.

× But here in UAE nowadays or in these years, I haven't seen rain in so long and it's been so hot lately.

✓ But here in the UAE nowadays, I haven't seen rain for so long, and it's been very hot lately.

The phrase 'in these years' is awkward; 'nowadays' suffices. Also, 'in so long' should be 'for so long' when referring to duration.

× Yes I would like to visit Canada since there is no there and I haven't seen snow.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit Canada since there is snow there, and I haven't seen it.

The phrase 'there is no there' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'there is snow there' to express the intended meaning.

× I haven't seen I haven't seen snow in my whole life since I live in UAE and a hot weather.

✓ I haven't seen snow in my whole life since I live in the UAE, which has hot weather.

The repetition 'I haven't seen I haven't seen' is redundant. Also, 'a hot weather' is incorrect; 'hot weather' is uncountable and does not need an article.

× I would like to experience another weather which is winter and Canada is a winter place.

✓ I would like to experience different weather, which is winter, and Canada is a winter country.

The phrase 'another weather' is incorrect; 'different weather' is appropriate. Also, 'winter place' is better expressed as 'winter country' or 'a place with winter.'