Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating 'it's' and use more precise vocabulary, such as 'mild' instead of 'warm weather'. Also, try to link your sentences smoothly.

例: I live in Mersin, a city in southern Turkey. The weather is mostly sunny and mild throughout the year, with winter temperatures rarely dropping below 10°C.

提案: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question, but try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer warm weather because I'm not used to very cold temperatures, and living in a hot city makes me tired of extreme heat.

提案: There are some pronunciation and word choice errors ('rats feather' and 'bets weather') that affect clarity. Also, try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

例: I prefer wet weather because dry conditions cause my skin and lips to become very dry and sometimes even crack, which is uncomfortable for me.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but use present tense consistently ('I check' instead of 'I checked') and avoid informal phrases like 'gonna'. Also, try to use linking words for coherence.

例: I check the weather forecast almost every day in the morning so I can dress appropriately for the day ahead.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and detail. Use more specific vocabulary and linking words to explain your points clearly.

例: Climate change has made weather patterns more extreme and unpredictable. For example, in Turkey, including my city, there is a serious water shortage caused by prolonged droughts.

提案: Your answer is good but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates because traveling allows me to experience new cultures and broaden my perspective on life.

× Where I live it's Merson.

✓ Where I live, it's Mersin.

The city name was misspelled as 'Merson' instead of 'Mersin'. Also, a comma after 'Where I live' improves clarity.

× It's almost every day sunny and we have a warm weather.

✓ It's almost sunny every day and we have warm weather.

The phrase 'a warm weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article. Also, 'almost every day sunny' is better expressed as 'almost sunny every day' for natural word order.

× Even in winter it's not colder than 10°.

✓ Even in winter, it's not colder than 10°.

A comma after 'Even in winter' improves sentence clarity and flow.

× since I'm living in a hot city, I'm sick of it.

✓ since I live in a hot city, I'm sick of it.

The present simple tense 'I live' is more appropriate here than the present continuous 'I'm living' because it describes a permanent situation.

× I personally prefer rats feather because my body dries so much when the weather is dry, my lips dry and sometimes they even bleed and also my hands are always dry.

✓ I personally prefer rainy weather because my body dries out so much when the weather is dry; my lips dry, sometimes even bleed, and my hands are always dry.

The phrase 'rats feather' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo for 'rainy weather'. Also, 'dries' should be 'dries out' to express the effect properly. The sentence was also improved for clarity and punctuation.

× That's why bets weather is more suitable for me.

✓ That's why wet weather is more suitable for me.

The word 'bets' is a typo and should be 'wet' to correctly describe the weather type.

× I checked the weather forecast almost every day because when I'm getting ready in the morning, I want to know how the weather is gonna be in the day.

✓ I check the weather forecast almost every day because when I'm getting ready in the morning, I want to know how the weather is going to be during the day.

The verb 'checked' is past tense but the context indicates a habitual action, so present simple 'check' is correct. Also, 'gonna' is informal; 'going to' is preferred in formal speech. 'In the day' is better expressed as 'during the day'.

× Firstly, it's much harder than how it was before, and also especially in Turkey and in my city, there's a water crisis because of climate change.

✓ Firstly, it's much worse than before, and especially in Turkey and my city, there's a water crisis because of climate change.

The phrase 'much harder than how it was before' is awkward; 'much worse than before' is clearer and more natural. Also, 'and also especially' is redundant; 'especially' alone suffices.

× Yes, I would love to because I I'm really passionate about traveling and seeing different cultures, different cities and also different climates because then I have a different vision of life.

✓ Yes, I would love to because I'm really passionate about traveling and seeing different cultures, different cities, and also different climates because then I have a different vision of life.

The phrase 'I I'm' contains a repeated pronoun 'I' which is incorrect. Removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence.