Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid redundancy. Also, provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence.

例: I live in Yangon, which is well known for its rainy and humid weather. Therefore, I really enjoy sunny days because they are refreshing and uplifting.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by adding linking words and more specific reasons. Also, avoid informal phrases like 'You know' in formal speaking.

例: I definitely prefer hot weather because, during summer, I can enjoy eating cold watermelon and swimming in the river, which creates memorable and enjoyable experiences.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some sentence fragments and repetition. Use complete sentences and linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer dry weather because wet weather limits my activities. For instance, when it rains, I cannot go out with my friends, and my clothes become damp, which makes me feel upset.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and irrelevant information (visa cost). Focus on answering the question directly with clear and coherent sentences, using linking words if needed.

例: I usually check the weather forecast every night before going to bed. This helps me plan my outfit for the next day and get ready quickly in the morning.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some vocabulary errors ('glusters' instead of 'glaciers') and grammatical mistakes. Use precise vocabulary and linking words to improve clarity.

例: I believe the most obvious effect of climate change is global warming. As temperatures rise, glaciers melt, causing sea levels to increase, which poses serious risks to human life.

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use varied vocabulary and linking words to express your ideas more clearly and naturally.

例: I would love to visit the polar regions to see the fantastic views and experience the extreme climate. Although it might be challenging and risky, I am eager to try it.

× Yang is well known for rainy city, so it's raining and humid quite often.

✓ Yangon is well known as a rainy city, so it rains and is quite humid quite often.

The phrase 'well known for rainy city' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'well known as a rainy city'. Also, 'it's raining and humid quite often' should be 'it rains and is quite humid quite often' to correctly describe habitual weather conditions using present simple tense and proper adjective use.

× I'm really into sunny day.

✓ I'm really into sunny days.

The phrase 'sunny day' should be plural 'sunny days' because the speaker refers to sunny weather in general, not a single day.

× I definitely choose hot weather.

✓ I definitely prefer hot weather.

The verb 'choose' is less appropriate here; 'prefer' is the correct verb to express liking one option over another in this context. Also, present simple tense is correct for habitual preferences.

× in summer we are more likely to eat cold watermelon and swim in a river, which is quite memorable and meaningful.

✓ In summer, we are more likely to eat cold watermelon and swim in rivers, which is quite memorable and meaningful.

The preposition 'in' should be capitalized at the start of the sentence. Also, 'a river' should be plural 'rivers' to generalize the activity, and a comma is needed after 'summer' for correct punctuation.

× Which makes me upset.

✓ This makes me upset.

Starting a sentence with 'Which' is incorrect here; it should be connected to the previous sentence or replaced with 'This' to form a complete sentence.

× I'm a person who like to plan things, so every day I go to bed I like to check the visa cost 1st and prepare the outfits tomorrow so that I could put on clothes quickly at next morning which.

✓ I'm a person who likes to plan things, so every day before I go to bed, I like to check the weather forecast first and prepare my outfit for tomorrow so that I can get dressed quickly the next morning.

The verb 'like' should be 'likes' to agree with singular 'person'. 'Visa cost 1st' is incorrect; it should be 'weather forecast first'. 'Outfits tomorrow' should be 'my outfit for tomorrow'. 'Could put on clothes quickly at next morning which' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'can get dressed quickly the next morning'. Also, sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× with the temperature rises, the glusters melt and the sea levels rises, which is harmful for human existence.

✓ with the temperature rising, the glaciers melt and the sea levels rise, which is harmful for human existence.

'Temperature rises' should be 'temperature rising' to correctly use the present participle after 'with'. 'Glusters' is a misspelling of 'glaciers'. 'Sea levels rises' should be 'sea levels rise' to agree in number.

× I really want to say the fantastic view here and experience the extreme climate, which is quite challenging and risky, but I definitely want to try.

✓ I really want to see the fantastic view there and experience the extreme climate, which is quite challenging and risky, but I definitely want to try.

The verb 'say' is incorrect; it should be 'see' to express viewing. 'Here' should be 'there' because the speaker is talking about a different location.