Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is informative but a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: The weather in my hometown is tropical because it is near rivers and the Bay of Bengal. Summers are hot and long, while the monsoon season from June to September brings heavy rain. In contrast, winters are short and mild.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but some sentences are incomplete or unclear. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect your points. Also, check your grammar and word choice for clarity.

例: I usually prefer cool, sunny weather around 20°C because it is warm enough for outdoor activities like playing cricket or walking on the beach. Moreover, the natural light improves my mood, and the crisp air makes me feel energetic and comfortable.

提案: Avoid using filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and confident. Also, try to connect your ideas with linking words and keep your sentences clear and concise.

例: I prefer dry weather because heavy rainfall during the monsoon season often disrupts outdoor activities. Although temperatures can rise above 40°C in the dry season, the lack of rain makes traveling and working easier.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' to sound more fluent. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and keep your sentences concise.

例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast before planning outdoor activities because the weather in Bangladesh is unpredictable. For example, if rain is expected, I carry an umbrella; if it is very hot, I wear light clothes and stay hydrated.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical errors. Try to complete your sentences clearly and use linking words to organize your ideas logically. Also, provide specific examples to support your points.

例: Climate change has caused summers to become longer and hotter, making it uncomfortable. Additionally, the monsoon season has become unpredictable, leading to floods during the rainy season. Winters have also changed, becoming less distinct.

提案: Your answer has good content but some sentences are unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to use correct sentence structures and linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I would love to visit Switzerland because of its natural beauty, temperate climate, and sunny weather. Also, I want to visit island countries like the Maldives and Indonesia for their coastal geography and comfortable lifestyle.

× Summers are relatively hotter and longer, and monsoon season results from June to September often brings heavy rainfall.

✓ Summers are relatively hotter and longer, and the monsoon season from June to September often brings heavy rainfall.

The phrase 'monsoon season results from June to September' is incorrect. The verb 'results' is wrongly used here. The correct structure is 'the monsoon season from June to September often brings heavy rainfall.' This corrects the verb usage and sentence structure.

× Which is warm enough to enjoy outdoor activities like playing cricket or walking along the beach.

✓ It is warm enough to enjoy outdoor activities like playing cricket or walking along the beach.

The sentence 'Which is warm enough...' is a fragment and lacks a subject. Starting the sentence with 'It is' corrects the sentence structure and makes it a complete sentence.

× The natural light lifts a mood and the crisp air tips may energetic and comfortable.

✓ The natural light lifts my mood and the crisp air makes me energetic and comfortable.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and verbs. 'a mood' should be 'my mood', and 'tips may energetic and comfortable' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'makes me energetic and comfortable' to properly express the effect of the crisp air.

× Yes, there have been a considerable effect of climate change in recent years.

✓ Yes, there have been considerable effects of climate change in recent years.

The phrase 'a considerable effect' is singular, but 'have been' requires plural. Changing to 'considerable effects' matches the plural verb and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× In addition, the monsoon season has become very unpredictable and which brings a certain floods during the rainy season and winter has become.

✓ In addition, the monsoon season has become very unpredictable, which brings certain floods during the rainy season, and winter has changed.

The conjunction 'and which' is incorrect here. Removing 'and' and using a comma before 'which' correctly connects the clauses. Also, 'a certain floods' is incorrect; 'certain floods' is correct. The last part 'winter has become' is incomplete and needs clarification; 'winter has changed' is a better completion.

× because it has keeping comfortable lifestyle.

✓ because it offers a comfortable lifestyle.

The phrase 'it has keeping comfortable lifestyle' is grammatically incorrect. 'Has keeping' is not proper verb form. The correct phrase is 'offers a comfortable lifestyle' to express the intended meaning clearly.