Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding hesitations and redundant phrases. Also, use complete sentences and connect your ideas logically.

例: I live in a place with four distinct seasons, but I especially enjoy summer because it is warm and sunny. The sunshine also helps us get vitamin D, which is good for our health.

提案: Avoid repeating the same information and filler words. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples.

例: I prefer hot weather because I grew up in the Philippines, where the climate is warm and sunny most of the year. I find hot weather more comfortable and enjoyable.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid hesitations. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific examples.

例: Honestly, I prefer dry weather because it allows me to do more outdoor activities. For example, I can go hiking or have a picnic without worrying about rain.

提案: Make your answer more complete and fluent by avoiding pauses and incomplete sentences. Clearly explain when and why you check the weather forecast.

例: I usually check the weather forecast whenever I have plans to go outside, especially if it's for the next week. This helps me decide what to wear and whether to bring an umbrella.

提案: Try to provide at least a simple opinion or idea, even if you are unsure. You can mention common effects of climate change you have heard about.

例: Although I'm not an expert, I think climate change has caused more extreme weather, like stronger storms and hotter summers.

提案: Avoid repeating phrases and incomplete sentences. Provide reasons why you want to visit those places and use correct grammar.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates, such as Japan. I am interested in experiencing their unique weather and culture.

× We have Four Seasons, but I like during summer because summer gives sun and warm, uh, the sun is.

✓ We have four seasons, but I like summer because summer gives sun and warmth.

The phrase 'gives sun and warm' is incorrect because 'warm' is an adjective and should be replaced with the noun 'warmth' to correctly express what summer provides. Also, 'Four Seasons' should not be capitalized unless referring to a proper noun.

× The sun gave us uh, vitamins as well.

✓ The sun gives us vitamins as well.

The sentence refers to a general truth or habitual action, so the present tense 'gives' is appropriate instead of the past tense 'gave'.

× I prefer uh, hot weather because I used to live in the Philippines.

✓ I prefer hot weather because I used to live in the Philippines.

The filler 'uh' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow; removing it improves clarity and sentence structure.

× So I, I used to live in the Philippines and the weather in the Philippines is warm and, umm, hot weather, umm.

✓ So, I used to live in the Philippines, and the weather there is warm and hot.

The sentence has redundant phrases and filler words 'umm' that should be removed for clarity. Also, 'the weather in the Philippines is warm and hot weather' is repetitive; 'hot weather' suffices.

× Honestly speaking, I want I prefer the dry weather.

✓ Honestly speaking, I prefer dry weather.

The phrase 'I want I prefer' is incorrect and redundant; only 'I prefer' is needed. Also, 'the dry weather' can be simplified to 'dry weather' when speaking generally.

× Dry weather gives you more activities.

✓ Dry weather allows you to do more activities.

The phrase 'gives you more activities' is awkward; 'allows you to do more activities' is clearer and more natural.

× You can go anytime and anywhere.

✓ You can go anywhere at any time.

The phrase 'anytime and anywhere' is better expressed as 'anywhere at any time' for natural English word order.

× I always check the weather because. I have planned if I have a plan to go outside like for the next week I have to check the weather if sunny or.

✓ I always check the weather because if I have plans to go outside, like next week, I need to know if it will be sunny.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining the ideas into a complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I would like to visit other cities that has a different climate from where I live.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit other cities that have a different climate from where I live.

The relative pronoun 'that' refers to 'cities' which is plural, so the verb should be 'have' instead of 'has' to agree in number.

× I want to go to the Japan, go to Japan and.

✓ I want to go to Japan.

The definite article 'the' is not used before country names like 'Japan'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and should be finished properly.