Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by making it more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy like "very extreme kind of conditions" and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I live in the northern part of India, where the weather is quite extreme; summers are very hot, while winters are extremely cold.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your speech more fluent. Also, use more precise vocabulary and link your ideas clearly.

例: I prefer cold weather because the scorching summer heat makes me feel sweaty and uncomfortable all the time.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to organise your ideas logically using linking words and complete your sentences. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'bad weather' when you mean 'wet weather' or 'monsoon'.

例: I prefer wet weather, especially during the monsoon, because it brings greenery and freshness. On the other hand, dry weather makes my skin itchy and dry.

提案: Avoid repeating phrases like 'to adjust according to'. Also, try to make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer sentence structures.

例: No, I don't check the weather forecast regularly. However, sometimes I do check it to adjust my wardrobe because the temperature usually stays the same during the day.

提案: Try to avoid filler words and pronunciation errors like 'scrooting' instead of 'scorching'. Use linking words to connect your points and provide more specific examples.

例: One major effect of climate change is extreme weather conditions; some places experience freezing cold, while others suffer from scorching heat. Additionally, floods have become more frequent.

提案: Reduce filler words and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, try to use more natural expressions and avoid repetition.

例: I am planning to visit Zurich in Switzerland, which has a completely different climate from where I live. It is located in a different latitude zone and experiences dry and cold weather.

× I live in northern part of India which makes the place I live experience very extreme kind of conditions like it's very hot during summers and it is too cold during winters.

✓ I live in the northern part of India which makes the place I live experience very extreme kinds of conditions like it's very hot during summer and it is too cold during winter.

The phrase 'northern part' requires the definite article 'the' before it. 'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' because it refers to multiple types of conditions. Also, 'summers' and 'winters' are generally used in singular form when referring to seasons in general, so 'summer' and 'winter' are more appropriate here.

× I live in northern part of India which makes the place I live experience very extreme kind of conditions like it's very hot during summers and it is too cold during winters.

✓ I live in the northern part of India which makes the place I live experience very extreme kinds of conditions like it's very hot during summer and it is too cold during winter.

The phrase 'northern part' needs the definite article 'the' before it to specify the particular region. Without 'the', the sentence sounds incomplete or incorrect.

× I believe bad weather brings a lot of greenery around the environment, the gold breeze and the basically the monsoon.

✓ I believe bad weather brings a lot of greenery around the environment, the cool breeze and basically the monsoon.

The phrase 'the gold breeze' is incorrect; it should be 'the cool breeze' or another appropriate adjective. Also, 'the basically the monsoon' has redundant 'the's; it should be 'basically the monsoon'.

× I believe bad weather brings a lot of greenery around the environment, the gold breeze and the basically the monsoon.

✓ I believe bad weather brings a lot of greenery around the environment, the cool breeze and basically the monsoon.

The phrase 'the gold breeze' is incorrect; 'gold' is not an appropriate adjective here. It should be 'cool breeze'. Also, 'the basically the monsoon' has redundant articles; 'basically the monsoon' is correct.

× I believe bad weather brings a lot of greenery around the environment, the gold breeze and the basically the monsoon.

✓ I believe bad weather brings a lot of greenery around the environment, the cool breeze and basically the monsoon.

The definite article 'the' is used redundantly before 'basically the monsoon'. Only one 'the' is needed before 'monsoon'.

× No, not really. I'm not in the habit of checking constantly the temperature change, but sometimes I do check it to just adjust according to to adjust my wardrobe according to the temperature.

✓ No, not really. I'm not in the habit of constantly checking the temperature change, but sometimes I do check it to adjust my wardrobe according to the temperature.

The adverb 'constantly' should come before the verb 'checking' for correct word order. Also, the phrase 'to just adjust according to to adjust' is repetitive and incorrect; it should be simplified to 'to adjust'.

× But usually the temperature remains almost same during days.

✓ But usually the temperature remains almost the same during the day.

The phrase 'during days' is incorrect; it should be 'during the day' to refer to the general daytime period. Also, 'almost same' requires the definite article 'the' before 'same'.

× The most common, uh, consequence of climate change is that many places are experiencing excruciating weather conditions.

✓ The most common consequence of climate change is that many places are experiencing extreme weather conditions.

The adjective 'excruciating' is usually used to describe pain and is not appropriate for weather conditions. 'Extreme' is a better adjective to describe severe weather.

× Umm, either they are umm, freezing cold or they are, they are experiencing scrooting heat.

✓ Umm, either they are freezing cold or they are experiencing scorching heat.

The word 'scrooting' is a misspelling of 'scorching'. Also, the repeated 'they are' is redundant and should be removed.

× Uh, actually, it is present in a entirely different, uh, zone of the umm, latitudes of the earth, and it has more dry and cold weather condition.

✓ Uh, actually, it is present in an entirely different zone of the latitudes of the earth, and it has drier and colder weather conditions.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound like 'entirely'. Also, 'more dry and cold weather condition' is incorrect; it should be 'drier and colder weather conditions' to use comparative adjectives and plural noun.