Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your sentences grammatically correct and more natural. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I live in Hong Kong, which is a city located in the tropical region. In summer, the weather is hot and wet, while in winter, it becomes drier but remains mild and not too cold.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by adding a linking word and a bit more detail to support your opinion.

例: I prefer cold weather because, although hot weather is common here, it makes outdoor activities more demanding on my physical fitness.

提案: There is a mistake in your answer ('what's weather' should be 'wet weather'). Also, try to use more natural expressions and explain your preference clearly with linking words.

例: I prefer wet weather because dry weather makes me feel as if I am being baked inside an oven, which is very uncomfortable.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words to make it smoother and clearer.

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every day because I need to decide what clothes to wear and whether I should bring an umbrella. It would be troublesome if it rains and I forget to bring one.

提案: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Climate change has caused many adverse effects recently. For example, the frequency of typhoons has increased, and the average temperature has risen significantly.

提案: Your answer is relevant and clear. To improve, you could use linking words and add a bit more detail to make your response more engaging.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because they have different living habits compared to mine. Moreover, it would be interesting to learn more about the indigenous people and their cultures in those places.

× I live in Hong Kong is city located in the tropical region.

✓ I live in Hong Kong, which is a city located in the tropical region.

The original sentence lacks a relative pronoun and proper punctuation to connect the two clauses. Adding 'which is' and a comma correctly links the clauses and clarifies the meaning.

× I should know whether umbrella is needed to bring.

✓ I should know whether an umbrella is needed to bring.

The noun 'umbrella' is countable and singular here, so it requires an indefinite article 'an' before it to be grammatically correct.

× I prefer what's weather because dry weather makes me as if being baked inside an oven.

✓ I prefer dry weather because dry weather makes me feel as if I am being baked inside an oven.

The phrase 'what's weather' is incorrect; it should be 'dry weather'. Also, the expression 'makes me as if being baked' is incomplete and needs a verb like 'feel' and a subject 'I am' to be grammatically correct.

× If it rains without bringing umbrella, it'd be troublesome.

✓ If it rains without bringing an umbrella, it'd be troublesome.

Again, 'umbrella' is a singular countable noun and requires the indefinite article 'an' before it.

× Climate change in recent years brings adverse weather in many aspects.

✓ Climate change in recent years has brought adverse weather in many aspects.

The present tense 'brings' is inappropriate here because the sentence refers to recent past events. The present perfect 'has brought' correctly indicates an action that started in the past and continues to the present.

× If lawless illustration is the frequency of typhoon soaring in recent years and the mean temperature has been soaring also.

✓ For example, the frequency of typhoons has been soaring in recent years, and the mean temperature has been rising as well.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'If lawless illustration' is incorrect and should be replaced with 'For example'. Also, the sentence needs to be restructured to form a complete and clear statement.

× It would be interesting to explore more about the indigenous people in those countries or cities.

✓ It would be interesting to explore more of the indigenous people in those countries or cities.

The preposition 'about' is less appropriate here; 'explore more of' better conveys the idea of learning or experiencing more regarding the indigenous people.