Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，缺少连贯的连接词。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达方式，并且注意时态和单复数的正确使用。

例: The weather where I live is usually rainy during the winter because of the east wind. We also experience typhoons in both summer and winter, so it rains a lot during these seasons.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够流畅。建议注意时态一致性，避免重复词汇，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: When I was a child, I preferred hot weather because I could enjoy hanging out with my friends outside. However, now I like cold weather more, especially winter, even though it rains a lot.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议使用完整句子，注意主谓一致，并且用连接词连接观点和原因。

例: I definitely prefer dry weather because when it is too wet, we cannot go outside, which makes me feel depressed. However, if it is too dry, there might not be enough water.

提案: 回答中语法错误明显，表达不自然。建议使用正确的句型和词汇，避免直译，表达更地道。

例: I usually don't check the weather forecast, but when a typhoon is approaching, I check it to make sure whether I should bring an umbrella.

提案: 回答内容不完整且表达混乱，缺少具体细节和连贯性。建议明确表达观点，补充具体影响，并使用连接词使句子连贯。

例: In my opinion, one noticeable effect of climate change is that summers have become hotter and hotter. It is often too hot to go outside during the middle of the day.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的句子结构，避免重复和错误的词汇，表达更具体的想法。

例: Sure, I would like to visit cities with different climates from where I live. For example, I once spent a month in a city where the weather was nice, sunny but not too hot.

× It is a rainy day in the whole winter because of the east external wind and it always with typhoons.

✓ It is rainy throughout the whole winter because of the east external wind and it is always accompanied by typhoons.

这里“a rainy day”与“the whole winter”时间范围不匹配，应使用不可数形容天气状况“rainy”。另外，句子缺少谓语动词“is”连接“it always with typhoons”，应改为“it is always accompanied by typhoons”。

× I can enjoy to hang out with my friend friends outside.

✓ I can enjoy hanging out with my friends outside.

“friend friends”重复且单复数错误，应使用复数“friends”。“enjoy”后应接动名词形式“hanging”，而不是不定式“to hang”。

× When I was a child I prefer hot weather because I can enjoy to hang out with my friend friends outside.

✓ When I was a child, I preferred hot weather because I could enjoy hanging out with my friends outside.

句子描述过去的情况，谓语动词应使用过去时“preferred”和“could”。

× For me definitely dry because if it too wet we cannot go outside.

✓ For me, definitely dry because if it is too wet, we cannot go outside.

句子缺少动词“is”，且“too wet”前应加“is”构成完整句子。

× That made me feel depression but if it's too dry the water will not be enough.

✓ That makes me feel depressed, but if it's too dry, there will not be enough water.

“made”应改为现在时“makes”以符合上下文时态；“feel depression”应改为“feel depressed”，因为“depressed”是形容词，表示感受；“the water will not be enough”表达不自然，应改为“there will not be enough water”。

× However, when the typhoon is about to coming, I will check the weather forecast in order to sure should I bring a umbrella?

✓ However, when the typhoon is about to come, I will check the weather forecast to be sure whether I should bring an umbrella.

“about to coming”应改为“about to come”，因为“about to”后接动词原形；“in order to sure”表达错误，应改为“to be sure”；“should I bring a umbrella?”应改为陈述语序“whether I should bring an umbrella”，且“a umbrella”应为“an umbrella”。

× In my opinion, much to make me impressed is in the summer day, the day become hotter and hotter.

✓ In my opinion, what impresses me most is that in summer days, the weather becomes hotter and hotter.

“much to make me impressed”表达不自然，应改为“what impresses me most”；“in the summer day”应为复数“in summer days”；“the day become”主谓不一致，应改为“the weather becomes”。

× We couldn't even go outside in the middle. In the middle day it will make.

✓ We couldn't even go outside in the middle of the day because it becomes too hot.

句子结构不完整，“in the middle”应具体说明“in the middle of the day”；“In the middle day it will make”不完整，应补充完整表达原因。

× Sure, I would like to visit other cities that have different climate from my life.

✓ Sure, I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live.

“different climate”应为复数“different climates”；“from my life”表达不当，应为“from where I live”。

× I have spent a month to go to spend.

✓ I have spent a month there.

“have spent a month to go to spend”结构混乱，应简化为“I have spent a month there”。

× There's weather is pretty good, it always shining but not hot.

✓ The weather there is pretty good; it is always sunny but not hot.

“There's weather”错误，应为“The weather”；“it always shining”缺少动词“is”，应为“it is always sunny”。