Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to use simpler sentence structures and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy and grammatical errors to make your response more natural and effective.

例: I live in a tropical climate where it is usually hot and humid. During the monsoon season, we get heavy rain. In winter, the weather becomes cold and chilly with strong winds for about four months. Overall, we experience different seasons throughout the year.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons. Avoid unrelated details and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

例: I prefer cold weather because it helps me feel relaxed and healthy. Also, during cold seasons, I enjoy eating fresh green vegetables which are good for my health.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but lacks coherence and completeness. Use linking words to connect your points and provide full sentences. Also, explain your reasons clearly and avoid incomplete thoughts.

例: I generally prefer wet weather, especially during the rainy season. The fresh scent of wet clay is very refreshing and helps me feel relaxed and healthy. Additionally, the rain helps vegetables grow, which is beneficial.

提案: Your answer repeats ideas and has grammatical errors. Try to avoid repetition and use clear, concise sentences. Use linking words to explain why and when you check the weather forecast.

例: I frequently check the weather forecast during the monsoon season, especially when it is time to harvest crops. This helps us plan the harvesting based on the expected rain.

提案: Your answer covers important points but is not very clear and has grammatical mistakes. Use simpler sentences and linking words to organize your ideas logically. Also, be specific and avoid vague phrases.

例: Climate change is caused by the emission of greenhouse gases. It affects biodiversity and leads to deforestation and environmental degradation worldwide. Additionally, soil erosion increases and many rivers flood every year.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear but contains some repetition and minor errors. Try to avoid repeating phrases and check your grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I would definitely like to visit cities with different climates. Experiencing a colder or more tropical environment can be refreshing and exciting. For example, visiting a snowy city would allow me to try activities like skiing, which are not possible where I live, making it a unique and memorable experience.

× Where I reside the weather is like a tropical climate.

✓ Where I reside, the weather is like a tropical climate.

A comma is needed after the introductory clause 'Where I reside' to separate it from the main clause for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× ...and we experience a lot of rain during a monsoon season...

✓ ...and we experience a lot of rain during the monsoon season...

The definite article 'the' should be used before 'monsoon season' because it refers to a specific, known season.

× ...and additionally though talk about a winter season, there is a cold and chilly.

✓ ...and additionally, though talking about the winter season, it is cold and chilly.

Use 'the' before 'winter season' as it refers to a specific season. Also, 'talk' should be changed to 'talking' to fit the sentence structure.

× We chilly wind throughout the four month.

✓ We have chilly wind throughout the four months.

The sentence lacks a verb; 'have' is needed. Also, 'month' should be plural 'months' to match 'four'.

× We experience the different season according to the different months of the year.

✓ We experience different seasons according to the different months of the year.

'Season' should be plural 'seasons' because multiple seasons are experienced.

× I prefer especially the cold weather where the we get chance to eat a green vegetable that help me to keep relaxed and also it is a good for the health and also keep me organized.

✓ I especially prefer cold weather where we get a chance to eat green vegetables that help me to stay relaxed; it is also good for health and helps me stay organized.

Removed unnecessary 'the' before 'cold weather' and 'we'. 'A chance' needs the article 'a'. 'Green vegetable' should be plural 'green vegetables'. 'Help' should be 'help' as plural subject 'vegetables' is used. 'Keep relaxed' changed to 'stay relaxed' for natural expression. 'A good for the health' corrected to 'good for health'. Added conjunctions for clarity.

× I generally prefer wet weather because uh, it's during rainy season.

✓ I generally prefer wet weather because, uh, it's during the rainy season.

'The' is needed before 'rainy season' as it refers to a specific season.

× The fragrance or the scent of clay which touches the nose, which enhances our mind and keep me relaxed and also healthy.

✓ The fragrance or scent of clay touches the nose, which enhances the mind and keeps me relaxed and healthy.

Simplified sentence structure for clarity. 'Keep' changed to 'keeps' to agree with singular subject 'fragrance or scent'.

× Apart from this, mainly the vegetable.

✓ Apart from this, mainly vegetables.

Sentence fragment corrected by removing 'the' and making 'vegetable' plural to form a complete phrase.

× I frequently check weather during the monsoon season, especially at the time of harvesting and at the time of harvesting to check the weather.

✓ I frequently check the weather during the monsoon season, especially at the time of harvesting, to plan accordingly.

Removed repetition and added 'the' before 'weather'. Simplified sentence for clarity.

× The rain is going to happen on the on that base.

✓ The rain is going to happen, and on that basis, we plan to harvest the crop.

Corrected phrase 'on that base' to 'on that basis' and restructured sentence for clarity.

× Climate change is a result of emission of green greenhouse gas and the IT affects the biodiversity and also mainly in the deforestation as well as the environmental degradation is the major concern all over the globe and apart from these the soil erosion and many flour river get flooded every year.

✓ Climate change is a result of the emission of greenhouse gases, and it affects biodiversity, mainly through deforestation and environmental degradation, which are major concerns all over the globe. Apart from these, soil erosion occurs, and many floodplain rivers get flooded every year.

Corrected 'green greenhouse gas' to 'greenhouse gases'. 'The IT' changed to 'it'. Improved sentence structure and clarity. 'Flour river' corrected to 'floodplain rivers'.

× Yes, I would definitely like to visit city with different climate.

✓ Yes, I would definitely like to visit a city with a different climate.

Added articles 'a' before 'city' and 'different climate' for correct singular noun usage.

× For example, visi visiting a snowy city would allow me to drive interactivity that are not possible where I live, which would be unique and memorable experience.

✓ For example, visiting a snowy city would allow me to drive vehicles that are not possible where I live, which would be a unique and memorable experience.

Corrected 'visi visiting' to 'visiting'. 'Drive interactivity' changed to 'drive vehicles' for correct meaning. Added article 'a' before 'unique and memorable experience'.