Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: The weather where I live is generally warm and humid. In summer, temperatures can get quite high, often exceeding 30 degrees Celsius. Additionally, we experience frequent rain showers during the spring season, which helps keep the environment fresh.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và hoàn chỉnh câu trả lời. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể và hoàn chỉnh câu ví dụ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I prefer hot weather because I feel more comfortable and relaxed. Besides, I can participate in outdoor activities such as swimming or sailing with my family during the summer.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ chính xác. Bạn nên tránh lỗi như 'more cleaner' và sử dụng từ phù hợp hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và chính xác.

例: I prefer wet weather because I find it relaxing to watch the rain. Moreover, the air tends to be cleaner and fresher after rainfall.

提案: Câu trả lời chưa hoàn chỉnh và thiếu chi tiết cụ thể. Bạn nên hoàn thành câu và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy cung cấp thêm thông tin về tần suất và lý do bạn kiểm tra dự báo thời tiết.

例: I usually check the weather forecast on television every morning. If I'm busy, I check it on my phone during the day to stay updated on temperature changes and weather conditions.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không chính xác. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và cung cấp các chi tiết cụ thể, sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: In recent years, climate change has had negative effects on both people and the environment. It has caused air and water pollution, which harms people's health and increases the rate of diseases.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có lỗi chính tả và ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'wedding warm clothes' nên là 'wearing warm clothes'. Hãy sử dụng liên từ phù hợp và hoàn chỉnh câu trả lời để tự nhiên hơn.

例: I would like to visit Korea because it has cold weather. Therefore, I can go skiing with my friends. Moreover, I enjoy wearing warm clothes during winter.

× It has high temperature and usually rains in spring.

✓ It has high temperatures and usually rains in spring.

The noun 'temperature' should be plural 'temperatures' because it refers to varying degrees over time, not a single temperature. In English, when talking about general conditions, plural form is often used.

× The weather.

✓ The weather varies throughout the year.

The sentence 'The weather.' is incomplete and lacks a verb, making it a sentence fragment. A complete sentence requires at least a subject and a verb.

× Beside I can take part in outdoor activity.

✓ Besides, I can take part in outdoor activities.

The word 'Beside' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'Besides' meaning 'in addition'. Also, 'activity' should be plural 'activities' to match the context of multiple outdoor activities.

× For example, I can go swimming or go sailing with my family in the.

✓ For example, I can go swimming or sailing with my family.

The phrase 'in the.' is incomplete and unnecessary here. Also, 'go sailing' is sufficient without 'go' repeated. The sentence is clearer and grammatically correct without the incomplete phrase.

× Beside the air is more cleaner and fresher.

✓ Besides, the air is cleaner and fresher.

'Beside' should be 'Besides' to mean 'in addition'. Also, 'more cleaner' is incorrect because 'cleaner' is already a comparative adjective; 'more' is redundant.

× When I am busy, I often watch it on my phone.

✓ When I am busy, I often watch it on my phone.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not require correction.

× I usually check the temperature change or.

✓ I usually check the temperature changes or weather updates.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'or.' which is incomplete. It needs a complete phrase after 'or' to make sense.

× In recent years, climate change affects badly on both people and the environment.

✓ In recent years, climate change has affected both people and the environment badly.

The present perfect tense 'has affected' is appropriate to describe actions that started in the past and continue to the present. Also, 'affects badly on' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'has affected ... badly'.

× It goes polluted air and water beside it harm their people health.

✓ It causes polluted air and water, and it harms people's health.

'Goes polluted air and water' is incorrect; the verb 'causes' fits better. 'Beside' should be 'and'. 'Their people health' is incorrect; 'people's health' is the correct possessive form.

× It increase the rate of disease.

✓ It increases the rate of disease.

Subject-verb agreement requires the verb 'increase' to be in third person singular form 'increases' to agree with singular subject 'It'.

× Therefore I can go skiing with my friend.

✓ Therefore, I can go skiing with my friend.

A comma is needed after 'Therefore' when it is used as a conjunctive adverb at the beginning of a sentence.

× Moreover, I prefer wedding warm clothes.

✓ Moreover, I prefer wearing warm clothes.

'Wedding' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'wearing' which is the gerund form of the verb 'wear'.