Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating 'weather' multiple times and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, provide a bit more specific detail about why you like spring and autumn.

例: I live in Iran, which experiences four distinct seasons, including cold winters and hot summers. I especially enjoy spring and autumn because the temperatures are mild and the scenery is beautiful with blooming flowers and colorful leaves.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains some unclear phrases and grammatical errors, such as 'in hot water' instead of 'in hot weather'. Try to use clearer expressions and complete your thoughts. Also, explain why you prefer cold weather with more specific reasons.

例: I prefer cold weather because hot weather often gives me headaches and makes me sweat excessively. In cold weather, I can dress warmly to stay comfortable, which is easier for me than dealing with the heat in summer.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains many hesitations and unclear phrases. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm', and complete your sentences fully. Provide specific reasons or examples to support your preference for dry weather.

例: I prefer dry weather because wet conditions, like those in northern Iran, often cause me headaches. Additionally, wet weather can lead to problems such as slippery roads and discomfort when going outside.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete, with some irrelevant phrases like 'Thanks Dad'. Avoid such phrases and finish your sentences. Also, explain your habits clearly and logically, using linking words to connect ideas.

例: No, I don't usually check the weather forecast because I enjoy being surprised by weather changes. Often, I can tell when it's going to snow by the smell in the air, so I don't feel the need to use weather apps.

提案: Your answer addresses the topic but is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Try to use correct verb tenses and complete your sentences. Provide specific examples of climate change effects and explain their impact clearly.

例: Climate change has had significant effects worldwide, including in Iran. Recently, we experienced an unprecedented drought, which forced us to conserve water and adapt our daily habits to cope with the shortage.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains many hesitations. Try to avoid filler words and complete your thoughts. Also, explain why you find cold places interesting with more specific details.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. For example, I enjoy cold places like Moscow because I find the snowy weather exciting and refreshing compared to the warmer climate where I live.

× Personally, I really like cold weather because in hot water I get a headache, I feel so bad and I sweat a lot.

✓ Personally, I really like cold weather because in hot weather I get a headache, I feel so bad and I sweat a lot.

The phrase 'in hot water' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'in hot weather' to refer to the temperature condition causing discomfort.

× So in cold weather I can put on lots of clothes in order to avoid cold, but in summer there's no.

✓ So in cold weather I can put on lots of clothes in order to avoid the cold, but in summer there isn't any.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'There's no' is vague; it should specify what is absent, such as 'there isn't any cold.' Also, 'avoid cold' needs the definite article 'the' to specify the cold weather.

× I prefer dry weather because in wet weather like, uh, what we have in north of Iran, I again get headache which is on, umm, in inevitable for me.

✓ I prefer dry weather because in wet weather, like what we have in the north of Iran, I again get a headache which is, umm, inevitable for me.

The phrase 'in north of Iran' is missing the definite article 'the.' Also, 'get headache' needs the article 'a' before 'headache.' The phrase 'which is on, umm, in inevitable' is incorrect; it should be 'which is, umm, inevitable.'

× Mostly I can smell that it's going to snow, so there is no need for me to application that forecast the weather.

✓ Mostly I can smell that it's going to snow, so there is no need for me to use that weather forecast.

The phrase 'to application that forecast the weather' is incorrect. The verb 'application' is a noun; the correct verb is 'use.' Also, 'forecast the weather' should be 'weather forecast.'

× Climate change had the deep effect on everywhere in this world, such as in Iran.

✓ Climate change has had a deep effect everywhere in the world, such as in Iran.

The present perfect tense 'has had' is appropriate here to indicate an effect continuing to the present. Also, 'the deep effect' should be 'a deep effect,' and 'on everywhere' is incorrect; 'everywhere' does not need 'on.'

× We faced lots of problem recently we experienced an unprecedented drought which was so annoying we need to conserve water in order to.

✓ We faced lots of problems recently; we experienced an unprecedented drought which was so annoying that we need to conserve water.

'Lots of problem' should be 'lots of problems' to match plural form. The sentence also needs punctuation to separate ideas. The phrase 'in order to' is incomplete and should be followed by an action or omitted.

× Yes, I do umm, I prefer going to cold places.

✓ Yes, I do. Umm, I prefer going to cold places.

The sentence runs two ideas together without proper punctuation. Adding a period after 'Yes, I do' separates the affirmation from the explanation.

× One of my favorite destination is Moscow because of the cold weather it has and the situation can lead me uh, to get frozen uh, which is so uh, interesting to me.

✓ One of my favorite destinations is Moscow because of the cold weather it has, and the situation can lead me to get frozen, which is so interesting to me.

'Favorite destination' should be plural 'destinations' because of 'one of.' The phrase 'lead me uh, to get frozen uh' should be 'lead me to get frozen' without filler words. Commas improve clarity.