Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide clearer descriptions.

例: I live in the United Arab Emirates, where the weather is mostly hot due to the desert landscape and sparse vegetation. Although it rarely rains, I find the weather generally pleasant.

提案: Use present tense consistently and improve sentence structure for clarity. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect reasons logically.

例: I prefer cold weather because it is better for my skin and motivates me to be more active. For instance, I enjoy jogging during cold days as it feels refreshing.

提案: Maintain consistent tense and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to organize your answer and provide specific examples.

例: I prefer wet weather, especially when it rains, because I enjoy cooking soups and relaxing by watching movies. This cozy atmosphere helps me feel more relaxed and sleep better.

提案: Use present simple tense and improve sentence structure for clarity. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to explain your habits logically.

例: I don't usually check the weather forecast. Instead, I look outside to see if it's cloudy or rainy, and then decide which activities to do based on the weather.

提案: Avoid repeating the word 'climate' and improve sentence flow using linking words. Provide more specific examples and explain the effects clearly.

例: Climate change is a serious concern because weather patterns are becoming unpredictable. For example, in our desert area, we sometimes experience long dry periods followed by sudden heavy rains.

提案: Make your answer more concise and natural by improving sentence structure and using linking words. Be specific about the activities you want to experience.

例: Yes, I enjoy visiting cities with different climates. Since I live in a desert area, I'm eager to visit tropical countries like Thailand to experience new activities and weather conditions.

× there's just a little trees

✓ there are just a few trees

The phrase 'a little' is used with uncountable nouns, but 'trees' is a countable noun. Therefore, 'a few' should be used instead of 'a little' to correctly quantify countable nouns.

× during cold weathers

✓ during cold weather

The noun 'weather' is uncountable and should not be pluralized. Using 'weathers' is incorrect; the singular form 'weather' is appropriate here.

× No, I'm not checking the weather forecast.

✓ No, I don't check the weather forecast.

The present continuous tense 'I'm not checking' implies an action happening right now, but the question asks about habitual action. The simple present tense 'I don't check' is correct for habitual actions.

× And then that's the time I will decide if what activities will I go and what activities will I do.

✓ And then that's the time I will decide which activities I will go to and which activities I will do.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unclear phrasing. The corrected sentence uses proper question word order and clarifies the activities to be chosen.

× here in desert we're in

✓ here in the desert where we are

The phrase 'here in desert we're in' is awkward and missing the definite article 'the' before 'desert'. Also, 'where we are' is clearer than 'we're in' at the end.

× sometimes there is no rain, then suddenly heavy rain will come.

✓ sometimes there is no rain, then suddenly heavy rain comes.

The sentence describes habitual or repeated events, so the simple present tense 'comes' is more appropriate than the future tense 'will come'.

× I'm here in desert area wherein I'm looking forward to go into some tropical countries

✓ I'm here in a desert area and I'm looking forward to going to some tropical countries

The phrase 'here in desert area' needs the article 'a' before 'desert area'. Also, 'wherein' is formal and awkward here; 'and' is better. 'Looking forward to' should be followed by a gerund ('going'), and 'go into' should be 'going to' for countries.