Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (however, but) to compare California and Korea. Keep it under 4–5 sentences.

例: I live in California, where the weather is warm and sunny most of the year. By contrast, Korea has four distinct seasons—hot summers and cold winters—so you can enjoy different activities each season. I prefer California's mild climate because I don't like very cold weather.

提案: Start with a direct answer, correct grammar (I prefer hot weather), give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (because, therefore), and avoid unclear phrases. Mention personal examples briefly.

例: I prefer hot weather. I find cold weather uncomfortable because I feel cold easily, so I have to wear many layers in winter. Also, warm weather gives me more choices for clothing and outdoor activities.

提案: Answer directly (I prefer dry weather), explain clearly why with specific details about leather crafting, and use linking words (because, so). Fix vocabulary and grammar (leather crafting, leather quality).

例: I prefer dry weather because I do leather crafting. When it is wet or humid, the leather can warp or develop mold, which ruins my work. Therefore dry conditions are better for my hobby and for outdoor activities.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), state frequency (every day, before playing tennis), and explain reason concisely using linking words. Correct vocabulary (weather forecast, tennis).

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast very often, especially before I play tennis. Because wet courts are dangerous, I always check the forecast a few hours before and the night before a planned match.

提案: Provide a clear opinion and give specific examples of effects (droughts, wildfires, sea-level rise). Use linking words (for example, therefore) and correct grammar. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I think climate change has caused more frequent droughts and wildfires in California. For example, drier conditions reduce water supply and increase fire risk, which affects farming and city life.

提案: Answer directly (No, I wouldn't), give 1–2 clear reasons and a short example of preferred destinations. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid repetition.

例: No, I would not like to visit much colder cities because I love warm weather and cannot stand the cold. If I travel, I prefer places with similar climates to California, like southern Spain or Hawaii.

× I currently living in California so here is really good weather in different way Korea Korea has per season summer, spring, winter, fall, so we could enjoy full season.

✓ I currently live in California, so the weather here is really good. In Korea there are four distinct seasons — summer, spring, winter, and fall — so we can enjoy all the seasons.

The student omitted the auxiliary verb for present continuous or should use simple present: 'I currently living' is incorrect; use 'I currently live' (present simple) to state a current situation. 'Here is really good weather' has inverted word order and article issues; correct is 'the weather here is really good'. 'Korea Korea has per season' is ungrammatical; use 'In Korea there are four distinct seasons' to correctly express plurality and order. Suggestions: use the appropriate present tense verb form and standard word order subject + verb + complement; use plural nouns with numbers (seasons).

× But other story in California, California has every day is warm so it's it's really good for me because I hate the cold weather so I.

✓ But in California, every day is warm, which is really good for me because I hate cold weather.

The original sentence has fragmented and repeated elements ('other story', 'California has every day is warm', 'it's it's', trailing 'so I'). This is a sentence structure and redundancy problem. Use a clear main clause and a relative clause: 'in California, every day is warm, which is really good for me because I hate cold weather.' Remove repeated words and finish the thought. Suggestion: plan sentence before speaking and avoid repetition; connect ideas with linking words like 'which' or 'so'.

× I prefer hot weather because I kind of the hate the cold weather person because I can stand in the cold weather.

✓ I prefer hot weather because I kind of hate cold weather; I cannot stand being in the cold.

This sentence contains awkward phrasing and contradictions. 'I kind of the hate the cold weather person' is ungrammatical. Use 'I kind of hate cold weather' for a mild preference, and express inability correctly: 'I cannot stand being in the cold.' Use 'cannot stand' + gerund to describe intolerance. Suggestion: simplify and separate ideas into two clauses for clarity.

× So when I use Korea, just wear a lot of cold in the winter season.

✓ When I was in Korea, I just wore a lot of warm clothes in the winter.

The student used 'use' instead of 'was' and 'wear a lot of cold' is incorrect; people wear warm clothing, not 'cold'. Preposition 'in' with a country and past tense 'was' are needed: 'When I was in Korea'. Also 'wear' should be past 'wore' to match the past context. Suggestion: use correct verbs for location ('be in') and collocations like 'wear warm clothes'.

× So yeah, I really, really summer season because there is many option for the clothing and everything activity.

✓ So yeah, I really like the summer season because there are many options for clothing and activities.

Missing verb 'like' after 'really, really'; 'there is many option' mixes singular 'is' with plural 'many options' — subject-verb and noun-number agreement. Also 'everything activity' should be 'activities'. Correct with 'there are many options'. Suggestion: ensure verb present ('I really like') and match singular/plural nouns with appropriate verbs and determiners.

× I'm less dry weather actually, uh, because I'm a crafting leather goose.

✓ I prefer dry weather actually, because I do leather crafting.

'I'm less dry weather' is incorrect; use 'I prefer dry weather'. 'a crafting leather goose' is garbled — likely meant 'I do leather crafting' or 'I make leather goods'. Article misuse and word order errors. Suggestion: use the verb 'prefer' for weather preference and correct noun phrase 'leather crafting' or 'leather goods'.

× So in the wet leather, the leather condition is not good.

✓ So when the leather gets wet, its condition is not good.

'In the wet leather' is incorrect preposition and word order. Use 'when the leather gets wet' to indicate condition change; use possessive 'its' for the leather's condition. Suggestion: use 'when' to introduce conditions and 'its' for possession.

× So I really like the dry weather because in dry weather I could more activities or leather crafting more good condition of the letters.

✓ So I really like dry weather because in dry weather I can do more activities and my leather crafting turns out better.

'I could more activities' is incorrect verb and object order; use modal 'can' + base verb: 'I can do more activities'. 'Leather crafting more good condition of the letters' is ungrammatical; express outcome: 'my leather crafting turns out better' or 'leather stays in better condition'. Suggestion: use correct modal verb + base verb and natural result clauses.

× So I prefer dry red.

✓ So I prefer dry weather.

'dry red' is a mispronounced or mistyped phrase; 'red' should be 'weather'. Use correct noun to match preference. Suggestion: confirm the intended noun when speaking; practice common collocations 'dry weather'.

× My hobby is spontaneous, so I have to check whether for fresh very often because the wet cord is very dangerous, uh, dangerous for tennis player.

✓ I'm spontaneous by nature, so I have to check the weather very often because wet courts are dangerous for tennis players.

Many structural issues: 'My hobby is spontaneous' is incorrect; use 'I'm spontaneous' or 'I am spontaneous by nature'. 'check whether for fresh' mixes words; should be 'check the weather'. 'wet cord' should be 'wet court' and plural agreement: 'wet courts are dangerous for tennis players'. Suggestion: use correct nouns and plural forms, and arrange clauses clearly.

× So before I have a plan for playing tennis, I have to check whether every single time.

✓ So before I make a plan to play tennis, I have to check the weather every single time.

'Before I have a plan for playing tennis' is awkward; use 'before I make a plan to play tennis'. Also 'check whether' should be 'check the weather'. Ensure consistent noun usage. Suggestion: use natural collocations: 'make a plan to play tennis' and 'check the weather'.

× So yeah, I kind of person check letter very often.

✓ So yeah, I'm the kind of person who checks the weather very often.

Missing subject-verb forms and wrong nouns: 'I kind of person' should be 'I'm the kind of person who...' and 'check letter' is 'checks the weather'. Also subject-verb agreement 'checks'. Suggestion: use relative clause 'the kind of person who' + verb in correct form.

× I live in California, there is a seriously doubt.

✓ I live in California; there is a serious drought.

'Seriously doubt' is a mistaken phrase; likely meant 'serious drought'. Also punctuation: use semicolon or separate sentences. 'Drought' is a noun meaning lack of water. Suggestion: learn similar-sounding words and choose correct vocabulary ('drought' not 'doubt').

× So we we have a problem about the nowhere because it makes a lot of problem with the in the city production.

✓ We have a serious problem with water shortage because it causes many problems for city operations and production.

Original has repetition, wrong word choice ('nowhere' instead of 'water'?), and ungrammatical phrases. 'The in the city production' should be 'city operations and production' or 'in urban production'. Clarify cause-effect: water shortage causes problems. Suggestion: use precise nouns ('water shortage') and standard phrase 'causes problems for'.

× So yeah is the weather is very effective our lives a lot of time.

✓ So yes, the weather has greatly affected our lives recently.

Awkward structure and wrong wording: 'the weather is very effective our lives a lot of time' should be 'the weather has greatly affected our lives'. Use present perfect 'has affected' to indicate recent effects. Suggestion: use 'affect' with appropriate adverb 'greatly' and correct verb tense.

× No, I don't like the different weather with my city because I really love warm weather.

✓ No, I don't like weather that is different from my city because I really love warm weather.

Use the preposition 'different from' not 'different with'. 'The different weather with my city' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: practice comparative prepositions: 'different from' or 'unlike'.

× As I told previous, I really, I can't stand in cold weather.

✓ As I said previously, I really can't stand cold weather.

Use correct past reporting 'As I said previously' rather than 'As I told previous'. 'Can't stand in cold weather' should be 'can't stand cold weather' (no 'in'). Suggestion: use standard phrases 'as I said' and omit unnecessary prepositions.

× So I really like the warm weather. So if I go to trip, I maybe I would like to go somewhere with the same weather in California.

✓ I really like warm weather, so if I go on a trip, I would like to go somewhere with weather similar to California's.

Combine sentences to avoid repetition. Use 'go on a trip' not 'go to trip'. 'I maybe I would like' is redundant; use 'I would like'. 'Same weather in California' should be 'weather similar to California's'. Suggestion: use 'go on a trip' and concise conditionals: 'if I go on a trip, I would like...'.

× So yeah, that answer is no.

✓ So yeah, the answer is no.

'That answer is no' is understandable but awkward; use 'the answer is no'. Minor pronoun/determiner choice. Suggestion: prefer 'the answer' in responses.