Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류와 어순 문제가 있습니다. 주제문으로 바로 답한 뒤 간단한 세부 정보를 추가하세요. 예: "It is a little cloudy and quite dry at the moment because it's winter in Korea."처럼 주어-동사-보어 구조를 맞추고 'because'로 이유를 연결하세요. 또한 'dry'의 비교급이나 부사를 잘 사용하세요.

例: It is a bit cloudy and quite dry at the moment because it's winter in Korea. Usually the air feels cold and crisp, so people wear warm coats and scarves.

提案: 답변이 장황하고 의미가 불분명합니다. 선호를 명확한 주제문으로 말한 뒤 이유를 1~2개로 구체적으로 설명하세요. 간단한 연결어(so, because, and)로 이유를 정리하고 음식이나 활동을 예로 들 때 정확한 단어를 사용하세요.

例: I prefer cold weather because I enjoy winter foods and activities. For example, I like eating warm Korean snacks like hotteok, and I also enjoy wearing layered clothes which make winters cozy.

提案: 의사 전달이 모호하며 문법과 어휘 선택이 부정확합니다. 간단한 주제문 후 이유를 논리적으로 제시하세요. 예를 들어 땀, 머리 스타일 문제 또는 활동의 편의성 같은 구체적 이유를 들되 짧고 명확하게 말하세요.

例: I prefer dry weather because I don't like getting sweaty and my hair holds its style better. In dry conditions it's easier to go out and enjoy outdoor activities without worrying about rain.

提案: 답이 반복적이고 문장이 매끄럽지 않습니다. 빈도를 명확히 말하고 이유를 한두 문장으로 정리하세요. 과거 경험을 예로 들면 설득력이 높아집니다. 불필요한 중복을 피하세요.

例: Yes, I always check the weather forecast before going out, usually in the morning. I do this because the weather here is unpredictable and once I forgot to check and it rained unexpectedly.

提案: 의견을 말하려는 시도는 좋지만 문법과 표현이 부정확합니다. 주제문으로 의견을 밝히고 구체적인 영향(예: 더 잦은 폭염, 한파, 이상 기상)을 2개 정도 제시하세요. 연결어로 논리를 정리하세요.

例: I think climate change has made weather more extreme in recent years. For example, we have experienced more heatwaves and sudden cold snaps, which affect agriculture and daily life.

提案: 의도는 명확하지만 표현이 조금 어색합니다. 선호를 분명히 밝히고 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 가능하면 방문하고 싶은 장소나 기후 유형(예: warmer coastal city, snowy region)을 예로 들면 더 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates to experience new weather. For instance, I would love to visit a coastal city with mild winters or a snowy mountain town to try winter sports.

× The weather like I live in is a little bit cloudy and so dried now because in Korea this is a winter.

✓ The weather where I live is a little cloudy and rather dry now because it is winter in Korea.

Subjects and clauses were misordered and some word choices were incorrect. Use 'The weather where I live' for correct relative clause order. Use 'a little cloudy and rather dry' to describe conditions; 'dried' is incorrect as an adjective for weather. Use 'it is winter in Korea' to state season. Improve by placing clauses in standard subject-verb-object order and choosing correct adjectives.

× Umm absolutely I prefer cold weather because and because in cold weather we can eat a jungle bun or gungoo gumma like Korean snacks and also we can get a clothes but how is not we can?

✓ I absolutely prefer cold weather because in cold weather we can eat snacks like jjinbbang or gun-gangjeong, and we can wear warm clothes.

The original sentence had unnecessary repetition and incorrect verbs and articles. Remove duplicate 'because' and the confusing phrase 'but how is not we can'. Use 'we can wear warm clothes' for correct verb choice. Also correct noun forms and order. Practice forming a single coherent clause: reason + examples.

× I prefer dry weather because in wet weather I get a sweat or I my hair setting is is breakdown but in dry weather I can I can get my illusions so many.

✓ I prefer dry weather because in wet weather I sweat and my hairstyle falls apart, but in dry weather I can maintain my style much better.

Tense and vocabulary were mixed and repeated. Use simple present 'I sweat' for general facts. 'My hair setting is is breakdown' is ungrammatical; use 'my hairstyle falls apart'. Avoid repeating 'I can'. 'I can maintain my style much better' is clearer. Improve by using correct verbs for habitual states.

× Umm, actually I always check the, the weather forecast because when, when I go outside because the weather is not stable and then, umm, when I didn't check my weather forecast, there has always the rains. So I always.

✓ I always check the weather forecast because the weather is unstable; when I don't check it, it often rains.

Mixed tenses and incorrect auxiliary usage: 'when I didn't check' should be simple present 'when I don't check' for habitual actions. 'There has always the rains' is incorrect; use 'it often rains'. Also remove filler words and repeated phrases. Use consistent present tense for routine actions.

× I think it get worse by each years because the weather instability is increased I think and also the weather degrees is so hot or so cold in Korea that is not the.

✓ I think it is getting worse each year because weather instability is increasing, and temperatures in Korea are becoming extremely hot or cold.

Verb forms and agreement are wrong: 'it get worse' should be 'it is getting worse' (present continuous for ongoing change). 'Each years' should be 'each year'. 'The weather degrees is' should be 'temperatures are'. Also finish the thought rather than ending with 'that is not the.' Use appropriate progressive tense for trends.

× Oh sure, I would like to visit the other cities, but in Korea usually the cities have have a similar weathers. But if I can I want to visit because I want to feel various weathers.

✓ Oh sure, I would like to visit other cities, but in Korea cities usually have similar weather. If I could, I would like to visit because I want to experience different climates.

Article and noun form errors: 'the other cities' is unnecessary; use 'other cities'. 'Have have a similar weathers' has duplication and wrong plural 'weathers'; use 'similar weather'. Conditional phrasing 'If I can I want to visit' is incorrect; use 'If I could, I would like to visit'. 'Feel various weathers' is unnatural; use 'experience different climates'.