Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid contradictions (tropical but very cold winters) without clarification. Use linking words like 'however' to show contrast and correct noun/verb forms.

例: I live in a tropical part of Southeast Asia, so the weather is generally hot and humid year-round. However, because I live near the mountains, summers are more bearable and nights can be cooler than in the lowlands.

提案: Use correct tense and grammar, give a brief reason with specific examples, and link ideas smoothly. Avoid vague references; specify what 'ACS' means (air conditioning). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer cold weather because there is often no air conditioning in public places where I live. For example, restaurants and buses usually lack cooling, so hot weather feels uncomfortable when I go out.

提案: Answer directly then give a specific reason. Correct grammar and avoid rhetorical questions that confuse the response. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore'.

例: I prefer wet weather because the humidity makes the air feel cooler and my skin stays hydrated. Therefore I feel more comfortable in wet weather than in dry, windy conditions.

提案: Be concise and give specific frequency and method (app, TV). Use linking words to connect reasons and avoid repetition. For example, say how often you check and why.

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast daily during the rainy and hot summer months using a smartphone app. I do this so I know when to bring an umbrella or avoid going out in extreme heat.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific local example and use correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'has had severe effects', 'glaciers are melting'). Avoid repetition and correct plural/singular forms.

例: Climate change has had severe effects worldwide, especially in the Himalayas. For example, I live in Nepal and I have noticed that glaciers and seasonal snow are melting more quickly, so winters now bring much less snow than in the past.

提案: Answer directly, then give a concise reason and a realistic plan. Correct grammar ('region', avoid repetition). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to clarify intent.

例: Yes, I would. Because I have lived all my life in a tropical region, I want to experience snowy, cold climates for a month or two—for example, staying in Canada or Russia—to see what daily life is like in winter.

× I live in tropical region of Southeast Asia, so it's like 24/7 hot and humid, especially in summer area.

✓ I live in the tropical region of Southeast Asia, so it's hot and humid almost all the time, especially in the summer.

The noun 'region' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific region. '24/7' is informal; 'almost all the time' fits better. 'Summer area' is incorrect — use 'in the summer'. Use of articles and natural collocation corrected. Suggestion: use 'the' for specific locations and choose natural time expressions.

× But I live near the mountains so the summer is kind of bearable but winters are very cold and chilly.

✓ But I live near the mountains, so the summer is kind of bearable, while winters are very cold and chilly.

Sentence needs a comma before 'so' for clarity and 'but' repeated is unnecessary; 'while' contrasts seasons more smoothly. Also 'winters' is fine plural. Suggestion: use appropriate conjunctions for contrast and add commas for readability.

× I always preferred cold weather because I live in a developing countries where ACS are not common.

✓ I have always preferred cold weather because I live in a developing country where air conditioners are not common.

The original mixes past 'preferred' with a habitual present situation; use present perfect 'have always preferred' for a long-term preference. 'Countries' should be singular 'country' to agree with 'a'. 'ACS' is unclear — expanded to 'air conditioners' for clarity and correctness. Suggestion: match tense to meaning (habitual preference) and ensure noun number agreement.

× Unlike western country, you can't find cooling system everywhere in public places like restaurants, which can be harder when going for a walk or something else.

✓ Unlike in Western countries, you can't find cooling systems everywhere in public places like restaurants, which makes it harder when you go for a walk or do other activities.

Use 'in' and plural 'countries' for the general comparison. 'Western' should be capitalized as a proper adjective. 'Cooling system' should be plural if speaking generally. 'Which can be harder' is vague; 'which makes it harder' is clearer, and 'when going for a walk or something else' should be 'when you go for a walk or do other activities.' Suggestion: use correct prepositions, plurality, and clearer phrasing.

× I prefer wet weather over dry because in dry your skin can get dehydrated, but in wet weather your body and face feels much cooler.

✓ I prefer wet weather to dry weather because in dry weather your skin can get dehydrated, but in wet weather your body and face feel much cooler.

Use 'prefer A to B' not 'over'. Repeat 'weather' to be clear. 'In dry' is missing 'weather'. Subject-verb agreement: 'your body and face' is plural, so use 'feel' not 'feels'. Suggestion: use correct prefer construction and ensure plural subjects take plural verbs.

× Also in which weather you don't feel warm as much as in dry?

✓ Also, in which weather do you not feel as warm as you do in dry weather?

The original word order is incorrect for a question in English. Use auxiliary 'do' for present simple questions and maintain parallel comparison by adding 'as you do in dry weather.' Suggestion: form questions with subject-auxiliary inversion and keep comparisons parallel.

× Yes, I have the habit of checking the weather forecast, but only in summer season and mostly in rainy season, so our summers last for long so it can get quite hot and humid.

✓ Yes, I have the habit of checking the weather forecast, but only in the summer and mostly in the rainy season, because our summers last a long time and can get quite hot and humid.

Use articles 'the summer' and 'the rainy season' for specific seasons. 'Last for long' is incorrect — use 'last a long time'. Combine clauses to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use 'the' with seasons when referring to habitual seasons and prefer natural expressions like 'last a long time.'

× So I always have to bring an umbrella if it's raining or very hot.

✓ So I always have to bring an umbrella if it's raining or if it is very hot.

Original is understandable but a parallel structure with two 'if' clauses is clearer. No major grammatical error beyond style. Suggestion: keep conditional clauses parallel for clarity.

× In recent years, climate change has soar adverse effect worldwide, especially in the Himalaya region.

✓ In recent years, climate change has had a severe adverse effect worldwide, especially in the Himalayan region.

'Has soar' is incorrect: use present perfect 'has had' plus adjective 'severe' not verb 'soar'. 'Himalaya' should be 'Himalayan' as adjective. Suggestion: use correct past participle 'had' after 'has' and choose proper adjectives.

× I live in Nepal so I notice that snow are melting very quickly and in the winter season there is no there is less snow than it was in the past.

✓ I live in Nepal, so I have noticed that the snow is melting very quickly, and in the winter there is less snow than there was in the past.

Use present perfect 'have noticed' for recent observations. 'Snow' as a mass noun takes singular verb 'is melting'. Remove duplicate 'there is' and use 'there was' for past comparison. Suggestion: match verb tense and correct agreement for mass nouns and comparisons.

× Yes, absolutely. I have lived all of my life in tropical revision, so I have never experienced what is what is living in a colder climate like Russia or Canada.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I have lived all my life in a tropical region, so I have never experienced what it is like to live in a colder climate such as Russia or Canada.

'Revision' is incorrect word; should be 'region.' Use 'a tropical region' with article. Fix duplicated phrase 'what is what is' and correct infinitive 'to live' after 'what it is like.' Suggestion: choose correct nouns and sentence pattern 'what it is like to...' for experiences.

× So one day for a month or two, I want to live in a place where there's snow, snow continuously or get very cold.

✓ So one day, for a month or two, I would like to live in a place where there's continuous snow or it gets very cold.

'I want to' is acceptable, but 'I would like to' is more polite for a future wish. 'Snow, snow continuously or get very cold' is ungrammatical; use 'continuous snow' or 'where it gets very cold.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and clear phrasing. Suggestion: use 'would like to' for desires and express conditions clearly like 'where there is continuous snow or where it gets very cold.'