Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the sentence structure more concise and correct grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh) and repetition.

例: At the moment it's summer in New Zealand, so the weather is warm and sunny. Because of that, I often enjoy outdoor activities such as having barbecues with my family and playing football with friends.

提案: Start directly answering the question and correct unclear phrases. Give a brief reason and one specific example. Use a linking word like 'because' to connect your reason.

例: I prefer cold weather to hot weather because I find hot temperatures uncomfortable. For example, I get sweaty and tired easily in heat, so I enjoy cooler climates where I can be active outdoors.

提案: Clarify your preference—your answer contradicts itself. Choose one preference, state it clearly, then give a concise reason and a specific example. Remove hesitations and repetition.

例: I prefer dry weather because it's easier to travel and plan activities. For instance, I can go hiking or meet friends without worrying about rain canceling plans.

提案: Provide a clearer, more natural response and add brief details about when you might check the forecast. Use linking words like 'however' to explain exceptions.

例: I don't check the forecast regularly; I usually leave it to chance. However, I do check the weather app the night before long trips or when I plan outdoor events.

提案: Give a focused statement about one or two effects, use specific examples, and avoid repetition. Use linking words such as 'for example' or 'as a result' to organize ideas.

例: I think climate change has made weather more extreme and unpredictable. For example, heatwaves are more frequent in summer, and older people I know complain that summers are much hotter than when they were young.

提案: Answer directly and give specific activities you want to try. Correct repetition and use natural phrasing. Keep it within a few clear sentences.

例: Yes, I would love to visit a snowy country because I've never experienced snow. I want to try activities like sledding, skiing, and building a snowman with friends.

× Recently the weather in New Zealand it has been summer, which is very amazing to enjoy, uh, the weather while doing outdoor activities with family and friends, for example, having a have a BBQ, playing football, fishing, etcetera.

✓ Recently the weather in New Zealand has been summer, which is great for enjoying outdoor activities with family and friends, for example having a BBQ, playing football, or fishing.

The sentence contains an extra subject 'it' after 'New Zealand', causing a sentence structure error (duplicate subject). Also 'very amazing to enjoy, uh, the weather while doing' is awkward; replace with 'great for enjoying' and remove repeated words like 'have a have a'. Use parallel items separated correctly. Suggestion: omit redundant subjects, simplify phrases, and keep parallel list items. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer to live in a cold country rather in a hot country because my body can't bear the hot weather.

✓ I prefer to live in a cold country rather than a hot country because my body can't bear hot weather.

The original uses incorrect comparison structure 'rather in' instead of 'rather than' and repeats articles unnecessarily. This is a third person singular issue? Actually the main problem is comparison/construction; mapped here to third person singular ID per instruction? Better mapping is sentence structure, but per list choose closest: the primary correction is using 'rather than' and removing 'the' before 'hot weather' to generalize. Suggestion: use 'rather than' for contrasts and omit unnecessary articles. Grammar problem type ID:2

× I do prefer being, uh, in wet weather, even though sometimes it's very hard to, to get to different places because of the weather, but it's better, uh, better of being in a dry and hot weather.

✓ I prefer being in wet weather, even though sometimes it is hard to get to different places because of the weather; however, it is better to be in dry and hot weather for some activities.

The sentence has redundant fillers and awkward phrasing 'better of being in a dry and hot weather'. Correct use is 'better to be in dry and hot weather' or 'better in dry, hot weather'. Remove repeated words and fillers. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use clear connectors like 'however' to show contrast. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I do not have the habit of checking the forecast regularly. I do prefer to leave it to chance and make it passive.

✓ I do not have the habit of checking the forecast regularly; I prefer to leave it to chance and not plan for it.

'Make it passive' is unnatural; use a clear verb phrase. Also 'do prefer' is unnecessary emphatic. Use simple present 'prefer'. Suggestion: prefer concise phrasing and avoid literal translations like 'make it passive'. Grammar problem type ID:10

× The weather has changed a lot compared to the previous years. Especially when I speak with elderly people, they usually they usually say they they are not used to this kind of weather, especially in summer when when they are used to see uh.

✓ The weather has changed a lot compared to previous years. When I speak with elderly people, they usually say they are not used to this kind of weather, especially in summer when they are used to seeing something different.

Problems include repeated words 'they usually they usually', 'they they', and 'when when', and incorrect verb form 'used to see' which should be 'used to seeing' after 'used to'. Also 'the previous years' is better as 'previous years'. Suggestion: remove repetitions and use correct 'used to' + gerund structure for habitual actions. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Absolutely, I would love to visit a snowy country because I've never been in a snow in a snow in a snowy country. Uh, I wanna do like outdoor activities like sliding in a snow, snow areas and build snowman.

✓ Absolutely, I would love to visit a snowy country because I've never been in the snow or to a snowy country. I want to do outdoor activities like sledding in snowy areas and building a snowman.

Errors include incorrect preposition 'in a snow' (use 'in the snow' or 'to a snowy country'), repetition, informal 'wanna', and incorrect verb forms: 'sliding in a snow' should be 'sledding in snowy areas' and 'build snowman' should be 'building a snowman'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('in the snow', 'to a country'), standard verbs ('want to'), and gerunds after 'like'. Grammar problem type ID:11