Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence describing current weather patterns, avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g., 'sipping'). Add one specific detail about a season to enrich the answer. Keep within 2–4 sentences.

例: I live in Canada, so we experience four distinct seasons: winter, spring, summer and autumn. I particularly enjoy spring because the temperatures become mild and parks fill with blossoms, which makes it pleasant to walk outside.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence stating your preference, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Avoid questions to the examiner and reduce hesitations like 'umm'.

例: I prefer hot weather because I enjoy going to the beach and relaxing by the sea. For example, in summer I often play outdoor sports with friends and feel more energetic and sociable.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then one specific reason or brief example. Remove repetitions and hesitations. Use a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'for instance') and finish the thought in one or two supporting sentences.

例: I prefer wet weather because I find rain refreshing and calming. For instance, I enjoy walking in light rain and sometimes sing or dance under an umbrella when the streets smell fresh.

提案: Good direct response and specific habit. Improve naturalness by using smoother phrasing and a linking phrase for purpose (e.g., 'so that'). Keep it to two sentences and avoid redundancy (e.g., 'what is the weather today').

例: Yes. I check the weather forecast every morning before going to work so that I can dress appropriately and avoid being uncomfortable outside.

提案: Start with a clear statement about the effects, then give one specific, well-formed example. Avoid vague or broken sentences and reduce hesitation. Use linking words ('for example', 'since') and give a concise consequence or result.

例: I think climate change has made temperatures more extreme in recent years. For example, when I visited India recently it felt much hotter than three years ago, making it difficult to stay outdoors midday and affecting daily routines.

提案: Give a direct response, then one clear reason and a brief example. Avoid confusing phrasing and contradictions (saying you love snow season then preferring warm cities). Decide your preference and explain logically using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'therefore').

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. For instance, since my city gets snowy winters, I would love to visit a warm coastal city in winter to enjoy beaches and outdoor activities I can't do at home.

× So now I live in Canada so here we have the mixed weathers like winter, summer, autumn and the spring.

✓ So now I live in Canada, so we have mixed weather like winter, summer, autumn and spring.

Use uncountable 'weather' not plural 'weathers' and remove unnecessary 'the' before seasons; also simplify punctuation. Suggestion: treat 'weather' as an uncountable noun and list seasons without 'the'.

× My favorite one is sipping while in my home country, uh, we have summer for seven months and uh.

✓ My favorite season here is spring, but in my home country we have summer for seven months.

Original has a misspelling 'sipping' and poor clause structure. Corrected to 'spring' and split into two clear clauses joined by 'but'. Ensure verb and noun clarity and remove filler 'uh'.

× Umm are you always prefer hot weather? Because I love to go on beach in the summer and enjoy the peace and calm over there.

✓ I always prefer hot weather because I love to go to the beach in the summer and enjoy the peace and calm there.

Question 'are you always prefer' is ungrammatical; student meant to state preference so use 'I always prefer'. Also use 'go to the beach' not 'go on beach', and remove sentence fragment by combining clauses. Keep present simple for habitual action.

× Umm I always like to go out play in the playgrounds with my friends so it is only possible in the hot weather.

✓ I always like to go out and play in the playgrounds with my friends, so that is possible only in hot weather.

Missing conjunction 'and' between 'go out' and 'play'; word order 'possible only' is more natural. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× I prefer the wet weather because I love the rain.

✓ I prefer wet weather because I love the rain.

Use 'wet weather' without the definite article when speaking generally. 'The wet weather' suggests a specific wet period; remove 'the' for general preference.

× I always dance, sing and enjoy in the rain and I always, uh.

✓ I always dance, sing and enjoy being in the rain.

Use 'enjoy being in the rain' or 'enjoy the rain'; 'enjoy in the rain' is incorrect. Remove trailing filler.

× Yes, I daily check the weather forecast before going to work because it helps me to know what is the weather today and according to that I can wear clothes so that I will not feel uncomfortable outside with the weather.

✓ Yes, I check the weather forecast daily before going to work because it helps me know what the weather will be like today, and based on that I can choose clothes so I will not feel uncomfortable outside.

Use natural adverb order 'check ... daily'; change 'helps me to know what is the weather today' to 'helps me know what the weather will be like today'. Use 'based on that' and 'choose clothes' for clarity. Maintain present simple for habitual routine.

× I think it is badly changed, especially in my home country, India.

✓ I think it has changed badly, especially in my home country, India.

Change to present perfect 'has changed' to describe a change over recent years; adverb 'badly' follows the verb and 'is changed' is passive and unnatural here.

× Uh, three years ago when I was there, it was not hot that much.

✓ Three years ago when I was there, it was not that hot.

Natural word order is 'not that hot' rather than 'not hot that much'. Keep past simple to describe conditions at that time.

× But recently when I visited to my country, oh, the hot was very bad.

✓ But recently when I visited my country, the heat was very bad.

Do not use 'visited to'; use 'visited my country'. Use 'heat' instead of 'the hot' to refer to high temperatures. Keep past simple 'visited'.

× Even I was not able to spend even.

✓ I was not even able to stay outside.

Original sentence is incomplete and redundant with 'even' twice. Clarify what was not possible: 'stay outside' or 'spend time outside'. Use past simple.

× Yes, I would definitely like to go to the other countries, specially during the snow season in my city because I love to go outside and play in the playgrounds and so I would like to go to the warm cities uh, if I have. An open.

✓ Yes, I would definitely like to go to other countries, especially during the snow season in my city, because I love to go outside and play in playgrounds, so I would like to visit warm cities if I have the opportunity.

Remove 'the' before 'other countries' for general meaning, correct 'specially' to 'especially', fix run-on sentence by reorganizing clauses, replace fragment 'if I have. An open.' with 'if I have the opportunity'. Use conditional 'would like' appropriately.