Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để tránh lỗi như "help to re energy" nên là "help to recharge my energy". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ phù hợp.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon after a short nap because they help me recharge my energy, which makes me more productive when studying.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "have a really high calories" nên là "have a lot of calories". Ngoài ra, hãy dùng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ như "not really healthy" và "cannot bring any healthy thing".

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy, especially for people like me who want to lose weight, because snacks usually have a lot of calories and little nutritional value. Therefore, I limit how many snacks I eat each day.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như "every children", "miss not cases", "get a lot of ways". Bạn nên dùng câu đơn giản, đúng ngữ pháp và có liên kết logic giữa các ý. Hãy chú ý chia động từ và dùng từ phù hợp.

例: Yes, I loved eating snacks when I was a child. My dad often bought me snacks, and I could eat them every day. However, because of that, I gained a lot of weight and was overweight for a long time.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, tránh lỗi như "consider is to eat", "crunchies" (nên là "crunchy"), và "is will attracted". Hãy dùng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và có liên kết logic giữa các ý để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I don't have a specific favorite snack, but I usually choose something crunchy and flavorful. Also, colorful packaging often attracts me a lot.

× It just help to re energy of my body so it's helped me to study more productive.

✓ It just helps to recharge the energy of my body so it helps me to study more productively.

The verb 'help' should be in the third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. Also, 're energy' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'recharge the energy'. 'Productive' is an adjective, but here an adverb 'productively' is needed to modify the verb 'study'. (Verb in the present participle form and subject-verb agreement errors)

× snacks just have a really high calories but cannot bring any healthy thing to the body.

✓ snacks just have really high calories but cannot bring anything healthy to the body.

The word 'calories' is plural, so 'have' is correct. However, 'a really high calories' is incorrect because 'calories' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'any healthy thing' is awkward; 'anything healthy' is more natural. (Third person singular issue and quantifier usage)

× every children love eating snacks and miss not cases.

✓ every child loves eating snacks and misses no cases.

'Every' is followed by a singular noun 'child' not plural 'children'. Also, 'miss not cases' is unclear and likely incorrect; possibly intended 'misses no cases' or 'does not miss any'. The verb 'love' should be 'loves' to agree with singular subject. (Singular and plural issue and subject-verb agreement)

× I really love eating snack, I can eat that for every day and my dad often buy me snacks.

✓ I really love eating snacks; I can eat them every day and my dad often buys me snacks.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match the context. 'Every day' is two words when referring to frequency. 'Buy' should be 'buys' to agree with singular subject 'my dad'. (Singular and plural issue and subject-verb agreement)

× But because of that I get a lot of ways and being fat for a long time.

✓ But because of that I gained a lot of weight and was fat for a long time.

The sentence refers to past events, so past tense verbs 'gained' and 'was' should be used instead of present tense 'get' and 'being'. Also, 'ways' is incorrect; the correct word is 'weight'. (Past tense issue)

× I don't have any specific kind of snacks that I really love, but I often consider is to eat something that's crunchies or flavorful and the packaging if that colourful is will attracted me a lot.

✓ I don't have any specific kind of snack that I really love, but I often consider eating something that's crunchy or flavorful, and if the packaging is colorful, it will attract me a lot.

'Kind' is singular, so 'snack' should be singular. 'Consider is to eat' is incorrect; the correct form is 'consider eating'. 'Crunchies' is incorrect; the adjective 'crunchy' should be used. 'If that colourful is will attracted me' is incorrect; correct form is 'if the packaging is colorful, it will attract me'. (Singular and plural issue, verb + -ing form, adjective use, and sentence structure errors)