Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more structured and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh' to sound more natural.

例: I usually eat snacks between meals, especially in the afternoon. When I was younger, I used to prefer snacks over proper meals. However, now I try to reduce snacking because I believe it is unhealthy to eat too often between meals.

提案: Improve coherence by using linking words properly and avoid filler words. Also, clarify your opinion with specific examples and correct grammar to sound more natural and effective.

例: I think eating snacks can be healthy or unhealthy depending on the type. For example, fruits and vegetables are healthy snacks, but eating sweets like chocolate or candy bars is unhealthy.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples. Also, check grammar and pronunciation for clarity.

例: When I was young, I often ate snacks and sometimes even skipped meals to enjoy them. For example, I liked eating chocolate, crackers, and potato chips.

提案: Make your answer more concise and avoid repeating the same words. Use linking words to show contrast and provide specific details about your current habits.

例: I used to enjoy chocolate, sweets, and crunchy snacks like chips. However, nowadays I try to reduce sugary foods and replace them with vegetables and fruits.

× I love to eat snacks in between meal.

✓ I love to eat snacks in between meals.

The phrase 'in between meal' is incorrect because 'meal' should be plural to indicate any meal time. The correct preposition usage is 'in between meals' to refer to the time between meals.

× Uh when I was young I love I eat snack more than a a proper meal.

✓ Uh when I was young I loved to eat snacks more than a proper meal.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the time is in the past ('when I was young'), the verb should be in the past tense 'loved' and 'eat' should be 'to eat' or 'ate'. Also, 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match the context.

× But now I'm trying to cut down eating snacks because I think it's very unhealthy to eat snacks in between meal.

✓ But now I'm trying to cut down on eating snacks because I think it's very unhealthy to eat snacks in between meals.

The phrase 'cut down eating' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'cut down on eating'. Also, 'in between meal' should be 'in between meals' as explained earlier.

× No, I think it's very unhealthy to eat snacks, but, uh, depends if you eat those fruits, vegetable and a snack is can be a healthy habit.

✓ No, I think it's very unhealthy to eat snacks, but, uh, it depends; if you eat fruits and vegetables, snacks can be a healthy habit.

The sentence has quantifier errors: 'those fruits' should be 'fruits' or 'those fruits', 'vegetable' should be plural 'vegetables', and 'a snack is can be' is incorrect; it should be 'snacks can be'. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Uh, on the other hand, if you eat sweet things like, uh, chocolate or sweet bar, all those kind of things is, uh, very unhealthy.

✓ Uh, on the other hand, if you eat sweet things like chocolate or sweet bars, all those kinds of things are very unhealthy.

'Sweet bar' should be plural 'sweet bars' to match 'things'. 'All those kind of things is' is incorrect; it should be 'all those kinds of things are' to agree in number.

× My favorites things to do is eating snack when I was when I was young I love to eat snacks and I even escaped a meal to just enjoying the snacks.

✓ My favorite thing to do was eating snacks when I was young. I loved to eat snacks and I even skipped a meal just to enjoy the snacks.

'Favorites things' should be 'favorite thing' (singular). 'Eating snack' should be 'eating snacks'. 'Escaped a meal' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'skipped a meal'. 'Just enjoying' should be 'just to enjoy' for correct infinitive usage.

× For example, I eating chocolate or crackle or potato chips.

✓ For example, I ate chocolate, crackers, or potato chips.

The verb 'I eating' is incorrect; it should be 'I ate' for past tense. 'Crackle' is likely a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'crackers', which is plural. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× All those cover and.

✓ All those cover it.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Assuming the intended meaning is 'All those cover it' or 'All those cover the snacks', the correction completes the sentence. 'Cover' as a verb needs an object; otherwise, the sentence is incomplete.

× I used to like to eat chocolate and sweets and crunchy snacks like chips, uh, sweets, chocolates, everything.

✓ I used to like to eat chocolates, sweets, and crunchy snacks like chips, everything.

The sentence repeats 'sweets' and 'chocolates' unnecessarily. Also, 'chocolate' should be plural 'chocolates' when referring to types or pieces. The corrected sentence removes redundancy and uses plural forms appropriately.

× But nowaday I try to cut down uh, eating sugary uh food.

✓ But nowadays I try to cut down on eating sugary food.

'Nowaday' should be 'nowadays'. The phrase 'cut down uh, eating' is incorrect; it should be 'cut down on eating'. The filler 'uh' is removed for clarity.

× So now I trying to add and replace vegetable or fruits.

✓ So now I am trying to add and replace vegetables or fruits.

The verb 'I trying' is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' for present continuous tense. 'Vegetable' should be plural 'vegetables' to match 'fruits'.