Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say when you usually eat snacks and why, using simple and correct sentences.

例: I usually eat snacks between meals, especially when I feel hungry but don't want a full meal. For instance, I might have a small piece of fruit to reduce my appetite until the next meal.

提案: Your answer is brief and lacks clarity. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons, using linking words to improve coherence. Also, correct grammar mistakes for better naturalness.

例: Yes, I think eating snacks can be healthy because they help increase my energy levels when I feel tired, especially if I ate lunch a long time ago.

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but contains repetition and some unclear phrases. Try to avoid repeating words and explain your points more clearly with linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, my mother always packed snacks in our lunch boxes for school. These snacks helped boost our energy while we waited for the next meal.

提案: Your answer is somewhat disorganised and contains filler words. Try to give a clear topic sentence, use linking words, and avoid hesitation. Also, be specific about why you like these snacks.

例: I prefer healthy and energising snacks. For instance, I enjoy eating fruits and vegetables like cucumbers and carrots because they reduce my appetite and provide energy.

× I tried to eat snacks between meals and as well when I feel hungry and I don't want to to eat a proper portion of food and I eat just a little bit snack to cut my appetite.

✓ I try to eat snacks between meals and also when I feel hungry and don't want to eat a proper portion of food, so I eat just a little snack to cut my appetite.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'tried' (past tense) instead of 'try' (present tense) to match the question about usual habits. Also, 'to to eat' is a repetition error. 'A little bit snack' is incorrect; it should be 'a little snack' because 'bit' is unnecessary here. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, it is healthy because they increase the energy level when I feel tired and I had meals earlier in the lunch.

✓ Yes, it is healthy because they increase my energy level when I feel tired and I have had my meal earlier at lunch.

The phrase 'I had meals earlier in the lunch' is incorrect. 'Had' should be present perfect 'have had' to indicate a completed action relevant to the present. Also, 'in the lunch' should be 'at lunch' as the correct preposition for meals. 'Energy level' is better as 'my energy level' for clarity.

× Yes, I used to eat everyday snacks when I was young.

✓ Yes, I used to eat snacks every day when I was young.

'Everyday' is an adjective meaning common or normal, but here the adverb 'every day' (two words) is needed to indicate frequency. Also, 'everyday snacks' is awkward; better to say 'snacks every day'.

× My mom used to make sure to put snacks in our lunch boxes when we used to go to school.

✓ My mom used to make sure to put snacks in our lunch boxes when we went to school.

'Used to go' is correct but repeating 'used to' twice in the same sentence is redundant. The second 'used to go' should be simple past 'went' to avoid repetition and improve sentence flow.

× However, snacks helped helped us a lot to boost that energy.

✓ However, snacks helped us a lot to boost that energy.

The word 'helped' is repeated twice by mistake. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence.

× It mean we're waiting for the next meal.

✓ It means we're waiting for the next meal.

'Mean' should be in the third person singular present tense 'means' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue.

× I like to eat healthier and energetic snacks.

✓ I like to eat healthy and energising snacks.

'Healthier' is a comparative adjective and not appropriate here; 'healthy' is the correct adjective to describe snacks. 'Energetic' describes people, not snacks; 'energising' is the correct adjective to describe snacks that provide energy.

× For example, I like eating uh, fruits or as well some vegetables like cucumber, carrots and they cut my appetite and I, they gave me energy.

✓ For example, I like eating fruits and some vegetables like cucumber and carrots because they cut my appetite and give me energy.

The phrase 'or as well some vegetables' is awkward; 'and some vegetables' is better. 'They gave me energy' should be present tense 'give me energy' to match the habitual action. Also, 'cut my appetite' is acceptable but 'reduce my appetite' is more natural. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.