Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily and keep your sentences concise.

例: I usually eat snacks in the early morning. Recently, my favorite snack has been bread with milk because it is simple and gives me energy to start the day.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and completeness. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific reasons. Also, avoid incomplete sentences.

例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy for me because I have some health issues. However, I need to eat them to gain energy, especially since at home I usually have only milk and bread available.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks supporting details. Make sure to finish your sentences and provide specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because they helped boost my energy during the day, especially after school when I needed a quick refreshment.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and somewhat unclear. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve flow.

例: I like to eat various snacks, but my favorite is bread with milk, which I eat every morning. This simple combination has become a daily habit for me.

× I used to eat at different types of snacks but recently the favorite one my favorite one snacks is bread and milk.

✓ I used to eat different types of snacks but recently my favorite snack is bread and milk.

The phrase 'different types of snacks' is correct, but 'the favorite one my favorite one snacks' is redundant and incorrect. 'Snack' should be singular when referring to a single favorite item. Also, 'eat at different types of snacks' is incorrect; it should be 'eat different types of snacks.'

× When I woke up, I woke up in the early morning and I eat snacks snacks as a milk and bread.

✓ When I woke up early in the morning, I ate snacks such as milk and bread.

The sentence incorrectly repeats 'woke up' and uses present tense 'eat' instead of past tense 'ate' to match the past time reference. Also, 'snacks snacks as a milk and bread' is incorrect; it should be 'snacks such as milk and bread.'

× As I have many health issues I think it is not healthy for me but to gain energy I have to eat those type of snacks because at my home there is only a milk and like some bread and.

✓ As I have many health issues, I think it is not healthy for me, but to gain energy I have to eat those types of snacks because at my home there is only milk and some bread.

The phrase 'have to eat those type of snacks' should be 'have to eat those types of snacks' to agree in number. Also, 'a milk' is incorrect; 'milk' is uncountable and does not need an article. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I used to eat snacks when I was young because it helped boost my energy and.

✓ Yes, I used to eat snacks when I was young because it helped boost my energy.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly. The past tense 'used to eat' and 'helped' are correctly used here.

× I love to eat different types of snacks but I used to eat milk with a bread in daily basis so it it has become my one of the favorite snacks and when I woke up I eat that.

✓ I love to eat different types of snacks, but I used to eat milk with bread on a daily basis, so it has become one of my favorite snacks, and when I wake up, I eat that.

'A bread' is incorrect; 'bread' is uncountable and does not need an article. 'In daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis.' The phrase 'my one of the favorite snacks' should be 'one of my favorite snacks.' Also, 'when I woke up I eat that' mixes past and present tense; it should be 'when I wake up, I eat that' to indicate habitual action.