Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Tapai ko uttar thap spashta ra prabhavit banau. "maybe 12 PM" jasto shabda haru avoid garnu ra sentence haru lai thap sangathit ra prabhavit banau. English ma "I usually eat snacks during my work break, around 12 PM. I love snacks because they boost my energy." jasto spashta ra prabhavit uttar dinu parcha.

例: I usually eat snacks during my work break, around 12 PM. I love having snacks because they boost my energy and help me stay focused throughout the day.

× I love taking snacks, it boosts my energy.

✓ I love eating snacks; they boost my energy.

The verb 'take' is not commonly used with 'snacks' in this context. The correct verb is 'eat' when referring to consuming food. Also, the sentence is a run-on; it should be separated properly. 'They' refers to 'snacks' and is plural, so the verb should be 'boost' not 'boosts'.

× I usually eat my snacks during the break at my work.

✓ I usually eat my snacks during the break at work.

The preposition 'at' before 'my work' is unnecessary and awkward. The phrase 'at work' is the correct and natural expression.

× I tend to have it around maybe 12 PM

✓ I tend to have them around maybe 12 PM.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but 'snacks' is plural, so the correct pronoun is 'them'.

× which is very healthy for food.

✓ which is very healthy food.

The phrase 'healthy for food' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'healthy food' to describe the snacks.

× whenever there is a pressure.

✓ whenever there is pressure.

The word 'pressure' is an uncountable noun here and does not need the article 'a'.

× my parents insisted me to take these snacks properly and regularly

✓ my parents insisted that I take these snacks properly and regularly

The verb 'insist' is followed by a clause with 'that' and the base form of the verb. Also, 'insisted me to take' is incorrect; it should be 'insisted that I take'.

× So snacks was important back then.

✓ So snacks were important back then.

'Snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was'.

× I used to also walk and do regular exercises.

✓ I also used to walk and do regular exercises.

The placement of 'also' is better before 'used to' for natural English word order.

× Mostly I typically eat light snacks, maybe it is some fruits and nuts, sometime a small light sandwiches.

✓ Mostly I typically eat light snacks, maybe some fruits and nuts, sometimes a small light sandwich.

'It is' is incorrect for plural 'fruits and nuts'; 'some' is sufficient. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' as an adverb. 'Sandwiches' is plural but 'a small light' indicates singular, so it should be 'sandwich'.

× So it is quite nutritious and basically it is combination of fruits mostly.

✓ So it is quite nutritious and basically it is a combination of mostly fruits.

The phrase 'combination of fruits mostly' is awkward. Adding the article 'a' before 'combination' and placing 'mostly' before 'fruits' improves clarity.