Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and slightly unnatural. Try to give a clear and direct response with proper sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific about your snack times.

例: I usually eat snacks around noon and again at 5:30 PM. These are the times I find most convenient for snacking.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I think eating snacks can be healthy if I choose fruits. However, sometimes I eat less healthy snacks like burgers and pizza, which are not as good for me.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Use past tense to talk about your childhood and be clear about your current habits. Keep sentences simple and direct.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. But now, I don't follow that routine as much.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid filler words and use correct verb forms.

例: I usually like to eat fruits such as apples, mangoes, and jackfruits. Besides fruits, I sometimes enjoy snacks like burgers, pizza, and cold drinks.

× Somewhat, usually I tend trying to eat snacks with fruits, but sometimes it coincides with another outer food like burger, pizza that's not so much healthy like fruits.

✓ Somewhat, usually I tend to try to eat snacks with fruits, but sometimes it coincides with other outside food like burgers or pizza, which are not as healthy as fruits.

The phrase 'tend trying' is incorrect; after 'tend' we use the infinitive form 'to try' not the gerund 'trying'. Also, 'another outer food' is awkward; 'other outside food' is better. 'Burger' and 'pizza' should be plural when referring generally. 'That's not so much healthy like fruits' should be 'which are not as healthy as fruits' to correctly compare healthiness.

× Yes, I am trying to. I try to eat snacks when I young but now at this moment at this age, I don't often follow this routine.

✓ Yes, I used to. I tried to eat snacks when I was young but now at this age, I don't often follow this routine.

The phrase 'I am trying to' is incorrect for past habits; 'I used to' is appropriate. 'I try to eat snacks when I young' is incorrect; it should be 'I tried to eat snacks when I was young' to reflect past tense and include the verb 'was' for the subject 'I'.

× I usually like to eat fruits like apple, mangoes and jackfruits, but other than this I used to some, uh, some outer food like burgers, pizza, et cetera and some cold drinks.

✓ I usually like to eat fruits like apples, mangoes, and jackfruits, but other than these I used to eat some other foods like burgers, pizza, etc., and some cold drinks.

The word 'apple' should be plural 'apples' to match the list of fruits. 'Other than this' should be 'other than these' to agree with plural 'fruits'. 'Used to some' is incomplete; it should be 'used to eat some'. 'Outer food' is incorrect; 'other foods' is better. 'Pizza' is uncountable but can be treated as plural in this context. Added commas for clarity.