Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa không được truyền đạt hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối để làm cho câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I usually eat snacks about once a week, especially on special occasions like my birthday or when I'm celebrating something.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp lại ý và lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy giải thích rõ hơn về lý do tại sao ăn đồ ăn vặt không tốt cho sức khỏe và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I think snacks are unhealthy because they are usually junk food that can cause weight gain due to high calories and unhealthy fats.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng các câu hoàn chỉnh và từ nối để liên kết các ý, đồng thời tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially when I felt sad because they made me feel better and happier. However, now I rarely eat them.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời câu hỏi một cách rõ ràng và sử dụng ngữ pháp chính xác. Hãy mô tả chi tiết hơn về loại đồ ăn vặt bạn thích và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để làm câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: I like a snack called Icy, which comes in various flavors like spicy sauce and crunchy textures. It tastes really delicious.

× To be honest when I grow up I really is not that is a junk food and is not good for my health.

✓ To be honest, when I grow up, I really do not think that it is junk food and it is not good for my health.

The verb 'is' is incorrectly used with the subject 'I'. The correct form is 'I do not think' to express the negative in present tense. Also, 'is a junk food' should be 'it is junk food' to refer correctly to the subject. The sentence needs auxiliary verb 'do' for negation with 'I'.

× So sometime maybe one times a week I is like maybe when I have birthday or celebrating something.

✓ So sometimes maybe once a week I like it, maybe when I have a birthday or am celebrating something.

The word 'sometime' should be plural 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'One times' is incorrect; it should be 'once'. 'I is like' is incorrect; it should be 'I like'. Also, 'have birthday' needs an article 'a birthday'. 'Celebrating' needs auxiliary verb 'am' to form present continuous tense.

× For me snack is not good food it's a junk food and it really harm for your health.

✓ For me, snacks are not good food; they're junk food and they really harm your health.

The singular 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to generalize. 'It really harm' is incorrect; it should be 'they really harm' to agree with plural subject. Also, 'harm for your health' should be 'harm your health' without 'for'.

× Harm for your body is make you gain weight and you have more calorie and negative fat.

✓ Harm to your body causes you to gain weight and have more calories and negative fat.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect; 'harm to' is correct. 'Is make you' is incorrect; it should be 'causes you to'. 'Calorie' should be plural 'calories'.

× It's not good for your health it make it.

✓ It's not good for your health; it makes it worse.

The sentence is a run-on and lacks clarity. It needs a semicolon or conjunction to separate clauses. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Adding 'worse' clarifies the meaning.

× When I was a kid, maybe from 3 to 16, when I'm kid I feel sad.

✓ When I was a kid, maybe from 3 to 16, I felt sad.

The phrase 'when I'm kid' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was a kid' to maintain past tense. 'I feel sad' should be 'I felt sad' to match past tense context.

× It really good and it really releases.

✓ It was really good and it really relieved me.

'It really good' lacks a verb; it should be 'It was really good'. 'It really releases' is unclear; 'it really relieved me' conveys the intended meaning.

× It make me happy when I eat snack.

✓ It makes me happy when I eat snacks.

'It make' should be 'It makes' to agree with singular subject. 'Eat snack' should be 'eat snacks' to generalize.

× I like a snack and the brand name is icy.

✓ I like a snack, and the brand name is Icy.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma before 'and' for clarity. 'Icy' should be capitalized as a brand name.

× Yeah, it is a snack have various test spicy sauce or crunchy or something.

✓ Yeah, it is a snack that has various tastes like spicy sauce or crunchy flavors or something.

'Snack have' should be 'snack that has' to be grammatically correct. 'Test' should be 'taste'. The sentence needs clearer structure to list examples.

× It really delicious to be.

✓ It is really delicious.

The phrase 'to be' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The correct sentence is 'It is really delicious.'