Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'more happier' là thừa từ. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: I usually eat snacks at home or school because they help me feel happier and more relaxed after a long day.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'sad' nên là 'feeling sad', câu 'you mustn't, you don't' không rõ nghĩa. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên kết ý rõ ràng hơn.

例: I think eating snacks can be healthy when I'm feeling stressed, but it's important not to eat too much because it can harm your health.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh dùng từ không cần thiết như 'you know'.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, I usually had fruits between meals because they were convenient and tasty.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, tránh câu rời rạc như 'Which make my health more stronger'. Hãy kết hợp câu để câu trả lời mạch lạc và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

例: I prefer eating fruits and candy because fruits contain many vitamins that help me stay healthy and energetic.

× I often eat snacks when I'm in the house or in my school because it makes me feel more happier and relaxed after a long day in school.

✓ I often eat snacks when I'm in the house or at my school because it makes me feel happier and more relaxed after a long day at school.

The word 'happier' is already a comparative adjective, so 'more' is unnecessary and incorrect before it. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to 'my school'. Additionally, 'in school' is better as 'at school' to indicate location. The correct order is 'happier and more relaxed' because 'happier' is a single-word comparative adjective and 'more relaxed' is a multi-word comparative adjective.

× I think it's healthy for me to eat snacks, especially when I sad or stressed after a long day of studying. However, I think you mustn't, you don't. You mustn't eat too much because it harm your health.

✓ I think it's healthy for me to eat snacks, especially when I am sad or stressed after a long day of studying. However, I think you mustn't eat too much because it harms your health.

The modal verb 'mustn't' should be followed directly by the base verb without additional words like 'you don't'. The verb 'harm' needs an 's' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'sad' and 'stressed' need the verb 'am' to form the correct present tense ('I am sad').

× Yes, I unit 2 is snacks quite often. When I was young, for example, I would have because or fruits between meals because they were, you know, convenient and tasty.

✓ Yes, I used to eat snacks quite often. When I was young, for example, I would have biscuits or fruits between meals because they were, you know, convenient and tasty.

The original sentence contains nonsensical phrases like 'unit 2 is snacks' and 'have because'. These are likely transcription errors. The corrected sentence uses 'used to eat snacks' to indicate past habitual action and replaces 'because' with 'biscuits' which fits the context of snacks. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I prefer to eat fruit and candy because it contains a lot of vitamins. Which make my health more stronger and more energetic.

✓ I prefer to eat fruit and candy because they contain a lot of vitamins, which make my health stronger and give me more energy.

The sentence fragment 'Which make my health more stronger and more energetic.' is incorrect. It should be connected to the previous sentence with a comma and 'which' should refer to 'vitamins' (plural), so the verb should be 'make'. 'More stronger' is incorrect; 'stronger' is already comparative. Also, 'more energetic' is better expressed as 'give me more energy' for clarity.