Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: "Snagging" nên là "snacking"; "have me past the time" nên là "helps me pass the time"). Bạn nên chú ý phát âm và sử dụng từ đúng để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, tránh lặp từ và giữ câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng.

例: I usually eat snacks when I feel bored or unhappy because it helps me feel better. For example, when I'm in a bad mood, I like to have something sweet or salty to comfort myself. Also, snacking helps me pass the time when I don't have much to do.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng để câu trả lời rõ ràng và chính xác hơn. Một số từ bị sai hoặc không phù hợp (ví dụ: "sugar rings snack", "opacity", "two decades", "news", "modern race") gây khó hiểu. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng.

例: I think eating snacks is generally unhealthy because many snacks contain a lot of sugar and unhealthy fats. For example, eating too many sugary snacks can lead to health problems like obesity and diabetes. However, some snacks like fruits or nuts can be healthy if eaten in moderation.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng khiến ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi sai và dùng từ đúng. Hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, I usually had fruits and biscuits several times a week because I liked their taste. Eating snacks was a fun part of my day and it made me feel more energetic.

提案: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không đúng (ví dụ: "tie up snake", "salty salty snake", "happen for you happy"). Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng từ vựng chính xác và câu đơn giản để truyền đạt ý tưởng rõ ràng hơn.

例: I like to eat salty snacks because they make me feel happy. For example, I enjoy eating salted nuts or chips sometimes, but I try to eat them in moderation to stay healthy.

× Snagging also have me past the time and when when I don't have much to do.

✓ Snacking also helps me pass the time when I don't have much to do.

The word 'Snagging' is a typo and should be 'Snacking'. 'Have' is incorrect for the singular subject 'Snacking'; it should be 'helps'. 'Past' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'pass'. The repeated 'when' is a redundancy and should be removed. The sentence should be corrected to maintain subject-verb agreement and proper verb usage.

× I think it instead is generally unhealthy because many snack contain a lot of sugar and unhealthy fats.

✓ I think it is generally unhealthy because many snacks contain a lot of sugar and unhealthy fats.

The noun 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to agree with 'many'. The verb 'contain' agrees with the plural subject 'snacks'. The word 'instead' is misplaced and unnecessary here, so it is removed for clarity.

× For example, eating too many sugar rings snack can lead to health problems like opacity and two decades.

✓ For example, eating too many sugary snacks can lead to health problems like obesity and diabetes.

'Sugar rings snack' is incorrect; it should be 'sugary snacks' to indicate plural and adjective form. 'Opacity' and 'two decades' are incorrect terms; likely intended were 'obesity' and 'diabetes', which are health problems related to sugar consumption.

× However, some snack like fruits or news can be healthy if even in the modern race.

✓ However, some snacks like fruits or nuts can be healthy even in the modern age.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' to agree with 'some'. 'News' is incorrect in this context; likely intended was 'nuts'. 'If even in the modern race' is unclear and corrected to 'even in the modern age' for meaning and grammar.

× Yes, I often add snacks when I work here on.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was working here.

The verb 'add' is incorrect; the past tense 'ate' fits the question about past habits. 'Work here on' is awkward; corrected to 'was working here' to indicate past continuous action.

× For example, I usually have fruit and biscuit several times a week because I sorry this week taste.

✓ For example, I usually have fruit and biscuits several times a week because I enjoy their taste.

'Biscuit' should be plural 'biscuits' to match 'fruit' as countable items. 'Sorry this week taste' is incorrect; likely intended 'enjoy their taste' to express liking.

× Eating snack was a fun part of my day and have me feel more energetic.

✓ Eating snacks was a fun part of my day and made me feel more energetic.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks'. 'Have' is incorrect; past tense 'made' fits the past context. Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are corrected.

× I think the tie up snake I like is salty salty snake because it happen for you happy and and I think it's the it's it's half now and happy then more in healthy.

✓ I think the type of snack I like is salty snacks because they make you happy, and I think it's healthier and happier than others.

'Tie up snake' is a mishearing or typo for 'type of snack'. 'Salty salty snake' should be 'salty snacks'. 'It happen for you happy' is incorrect; corrected to 'they make you happy'. The rest is unclear and corrected to express a comparison about health and happiness properly.