Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и структурированным. Избегайте излишних вводных фраз и старайтесь использовать связующие слова для логичности. Также можно добавить более конкретные детали о любимых фруктах или овощах.

例: I usually eat snacks three times a day, after breakfast, lunch, and dinner. For example, I like to have apples, carrots, or a small salad because they are healthy and refreshing.

提案: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность и разнообразить лексику. Используйте более точные выражения и связывающие слова для плавности речи.

例: Whether snacks are healthy depends on their type. For instance, eating chips is unhealthy because they contain a lot of fat, but fruits, vegetables, yogurt, and nuts are nutritious and better choices.

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз и нечетких выражений. Следует избегать слов-паразитов и строить предложения более ясно и логично. Также стоит добавить конкретные примеры и сравнения с настоящим временем.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. Back then, I liked ice cream and fruits, and I still enjoy these snacks now because they are tasty and healthy.

提案: Ответ слишком повторяет предыдущие и содержит много пауз. Рекомендуется использовать более разнообразную лексику и структурировать ответ, избегая повторов и слов-паразитов.

例: I enjoy a variety of snacks such as ice cream, fresh fruits like apples and bananas, salads, nuts, and dairy products like yogurt and cheese because they provide both taste and nutrition.

× I eat snacks maybe three times a day or after breakfast, lunch and dinners.

✓ I eat snacks maybe three times a day or after breakfast, lunch, and dinner.

The word 'dinners' should be singular 'dinner' because it refers to the meal in general, not multiple dinners. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' in a list for clarity.

× It depends on what's next to eat.

✓ It depends on what to eat next.

The phrase 'what's next to eat' is awkward. The correct prepositional phrase is 'what to eat next' to indicate the next item to be eaten.

× If you eat snacks like fruit, vegetables, yogurts, nuts, it will be healthier.

✓ If you eat snacks like fruit, vegetables, yogurt, nuts, it will be healthier.

The word 'yogurts' should be singular 'yogurt' when referring to the food in general, not multiple individual yogurts.

× Now I always uh, prefer to eat snacks like ice creams, fruit, yogurt, nuts and I do it right now too.

✓ Now I always, uh, prefer to eat snacks like ice cream, fruit, yogurt, nuts, and I do it right now too.

The word 'ice creams' should be singular 'ice cream' when referring to the food in general. Also, commas are needed for clarity in the list and before 'and'.

× It's how I said before, I like to eat, uh, snacks like I ice cream, uh, different, uh, kinds of fruit, sometimes vegetables, maybe salads, umm, nuts and different types of milk products.

✓ As I said before, I like to eat, uh, snacks like ice cream, uh, different, uh, kinds of fruit, sometimes vegetables, maybe salads, umm, nuts, and different types of milk products.

The phrase 'It's how I said before' is incorrect; it should be 'As I said before'. Also, 'I ice cream' is incorrect; it should be 'ice cream'. Commas are added for clarity in the list.