Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences clearer and avoid repeating words. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat snacks at night because I feel very hungry then. During the day, I don't eat snacks because my stomach doesn't feel empty.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words to explain your ideas. Also, avoid repeating words and incomplete sentences.

例: No, eating a lot of snacks is unhealthy. However, we can choose healthier alternatives, such as corn chips, instead of regular snacks.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas and make your answer more natural.

例: Yes, I used to eat a lot of snacks when I was young because I was immature and didn't know much about healthy eating.

提案: Your answer is clear but has some repetition and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating phrases and use comparative forms correctly. Also, add linking words for better flow.

例: I usually choose healthier snacks. For example, instead of potato chips, I eat corn chips because they are healthier than other snacks.

× Throughout the day I don't eat anything because I don't my stomach don't get empty.

✓ Throughout the day I don't eat anything because my stomach doesn't get empty.

The original sentence has a subject-verb agreement error and an unnecessary auxiliary verb 'don't' before 'my stomach'. The correct form is 'my stomach doesn't get empty' because 'stomach' is singular and requires 'does not' (doesn't) for negation.

× No, it is extremely unhealthy to consuming a lot of snacks.

✓ No, it is extremely unhealthy to consume a lot of snacks.

After 'to' (as a preposition or part of an infinitive), the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'to consuming' is incorrect; it should be 'to consume'.

× We can do do one thing we can. Replace our from their alternative like we can consume corn chips.

✓ We can do one thing: we can replace our snacks with alternatives like corn chips.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It repeats 'do' unnecessarily and lacks proper structure. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and uses proper punctuation and word order.

× Yeah, yes, I eat, used to eat a lot of snacks in my childhood because at that time I was little immature.

✓ Yeah, yes, I used to eat a lot of snacks in my childhood because at that time I was a little immature.

The phrase 'used to eat' indicates past habitual action and should not be combined with 'I eat'. Also, 'little' as an adjective needs an article 'a' before it when modifying 'immature'.

× They are much more healthier than any other snacks.

✓ They are much healthier than any other snacks.

The word 'healthier' is already a comparative adjective, so 'more' is redundant and incorrect. The correct form is 'much healthier'.