Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan dalam penggunaan kata. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan jelas untuk menjelaskan kapan Anda biasanya makan camilan, serta hindari kata-kata yang tidak dikenal atau salah eja.

例: I usually eat snacks when I feel hungry between meals, especially in the afternoon.

提案: Jawaban Anda perlu lebih terstruktur dan jelas. Jelaskan pendapat Anda dengan kalimat yang lebih teratur dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fat, which can lead to weight gain. Therefore, it's better to choose nutritious snacks.

提案: Jawaban Anda mengandung kesalahan tata bahasa dan kata yang tidak tepat. Gunakan kalimat yang benar dan jelaskan dengan lebih spesifik tentang camilan yang Anda sukai saat kecil.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. My father usually bought me fried chicken, which I really loved because of its delicious taste.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang fokus pada pertanyaan karena kopi bukan camilan. Jelaskan camilan favorit Anda dengan kalimat yang jelas dan gunakan kosakata yang sesuai.

例: I like to eat sweet snacks like cookies or chocolate because they taste good and give me energy.

× When I'm feeling hungry I love snacks that taste so acini or pollo.

✓ When I'm feeling hungry, I love snacks that taste like acini or pollo.

The phrase 'taste so acini or pollo' is incorrect because 'taste' should be followed by 'like' to compare flavors. The verb 'taste' here requires the preposition 'like' to indicate similarity in taste.

× I think it's not healthy because it will make us fat.

✓ I think it's not healthy because it will make me fat.

The pronoun 'us' is incorrect here because the speaker is referring to themselves personally. 'Me' should be used to indicate the effect on the speaker alone.

× We only need a good nutrition for our body, so snack it makes it.

✓ We only need good nutrition for our body, so snacks should provide it.

'A good nutrition' is incorrect because 'nutrition' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; it should be rephrased for clarity.

× Sometimes we eat snacks that not nutritious for our body, you know?

✓ Sometimes we eat snacks that are not nutritious for our body, you know?

The relative clause is missing the verb 'are' to link 'snacks' and 'not nutritious'. The pronoun usage is correct but the verb is missing.

× Yes, I often eat snack.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks.

The question is about past habits, so the verb should be in the past tense 'ate'. Also, 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match the habitual action.

× When I was young my daddy always bought me a snack like chicken.

✓ When I was young, my daddy always bought me snacks like chicken.

'A snack like chicken' is awkward; 'snacks like chicken' is more natural and plural to indicate various snack items.

× The taste is safari.

✓ The taste is savory.

The word 'safari' is incorrect in this context; likely the intended word is 'savory', which describes a pleasant taste.

× I really loved it and I always eat it when I was a child.

✓ I really loved it and I always ate it when I was a child.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame 'when I was a child'.

× I really love coffee, iced coffee, it makes me energize, like I eat coffee with some milk and it makes me so comfortable.

✓ I really love coffee, especially iced coffee. It energizes me. I like to drink coffee with some milk because it makes me feel comfortable.

The sentence has pronoun and verb usage issues. 'It makes me energize' is incorrect; 'energizes me' is correct. 'Like I eat coffee' is incorrect; 'I like to drink coffee' is appropriate. Also, splitting into clearer sentences improves clarity.