Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more concise by using proper sentence structure and avoiding redundancy. Start with a direct response, then add a reason using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. For example, explain when and why you eat snacks in a simple, natural way.

例: I usually eat snacks at night because I tend to get hungry before going to bed. Since I have dinner early and stay up late, I often crave something to eat during that time.

提案: Focus on organizing your answer logically with clear linking words. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and repeat words. Use specific examples to support your opinion and keep sentences concise and natural.

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because many contain additives and sugar. However, some healthy snacks exist, but I prefer homemade food since I know exactly what ingredients are used.

提案: Try to avoid repeating ideas and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons and keep your answer within 5 sentences. Make your answer more natural by using common expressions.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I found homemade food boring and repetitive. Snacks were my favourite treats back then.

提案: Be careful with word choice and pronunciation to avoid confusion (e.g., 'packed places' is unclear). Use specific snack names and explain your preference clearly. Keep sentences simple and avoid repetition.

例: I like to eat packaged snacks like chips and cookies. Even now, I crave these treats and usually grab them whenever I feel hungry between meals.

× I mostly prefer to eat snacks at that night because I have a very good bad habit of night craving because as I used to eat my dinner earlier than ate so but I sleep late night so because in that time frame usually I'm grabbing so at that time I prefer snacks.

✓ I mostly prefer to eat snacks at night because I have a bad habit of craving food at night. I usually eat my dinner early but sleep late, so during that time I usually grab snacks.

The original sentence has incorrect past tense usage and awkward phrasing. 'At that night' should be 'at night' for general habit. 'As I used to eat my dinner earlier than ate' is incorrect; it should be 'I usually eat my dinner early'. 'I'm grabbing' is present continuous but the context is habitual, so simple present 'I usually grab' is better. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct tense usage.

× No, definitely it's not healthy for anyone to eat snacks. But yeah, nowadays there are some healthy snacks, but uh, we always have to prefer the another type of food rather than a snack, especially homemade food that are much healthier because we know what has been added, added in this type of foods.

✓ No, definitely it's not healthy for anyone to eat snacks. But yeah, nowadays there are some healthy snacks, but we should always prefer other types of food rather than snacks, especially homemade food which is much healthier because we know what has been added to these foods.

The phrase 'prefer the another type of food' is incorrect; 'the' should be removed and 'another' changed to 'other types' to match plural 'foods'. 'That are much healthier' should be 'which is much healthier' because 'homemade food' is uncountable singular. Also, 'added, added in this type of foods' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'added to these foods'. Pronouns and determiners are corrected for proper agreement and clarity.

× When I was young, I loved to eat snacks. Even the snacks are my favorite food to eat because at that time we thought that homemade foods are so boring and so regular. So yeah, I love to eat snacks when I was young.

✓ When I was young, I loved to eat snacks. Even snacks were my favorite food to eat because at that time we thought that homemade foods were boring and too regular. So yeah, I loved to eat snacks when I was young.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Even the snacks are my favorite' should be 'Even snacks were my favorite' to maintain past tense. 'Homemade foods are so boring' should be 'were boring' to match past context. 'I love to eat snacks when I was young' should be 'I loved to eat snacks when I was young' for tense consistency.

× I like to eat packed packed places and cookies. I love to eat them even nowadays, even when I was that much old. I have a creamy for these things and whenever I have craving, I go and grab these things.

✓ I like to eat packaged snacks and cookies. I love to eat them even nowadays, even when I was older. I have a craving for these things and whenever I have a craving, I go and grab them.

'Packed packed places' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or error; corrected to 'packaged snacks'. 'I have a creamy' is incorrect; it should be 'I have a craving'. 'Whenever I have craving' needs an article: 'a craving'. 'Grab these things' is vague; 'grab them' is clearer. Also, 'when I was that much old' is awkward; 'when I was older' is better. Plural and singular forms are corrected for clarity and correctness.