Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and clear by directly answering the question with a topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid redundancy.

例: I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed during a busy day because they help me to relax and recharge.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Improve clarity by structuring your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using appropriate linking words. Also, use more precise vocabulary.

例: I think it depends on the type of snacks we eat. For instance, fruits and nuts provide a quick energy boost and help me stay focused, so they are healthy options.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains repetition and incomplete sentences. Focus on giving a direct response with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. Avoid repeating phrases and ensure your sentences are complete and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially sweet ones. However, I now understand that eating too many sugary or processed snacks is unhealthy.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to make your response more natural by using correct sentence structures and linking words. Be specific about the snacks you prefer and explain why.

例: I usually choose snacks that are beneficial for my body, such as bananas, dragon fruit, and avocados, because they provide essential nutrients and energy.

× I normally eat snack when I feel so stressful in the busy day, so I use snack as a food that can help me to more relax and call when I in the busy day.

✓ I normally eat snacks when I feel stressed in a busy day, so I use snacks as food that can help me to relax more and calm down when I am in a busy day.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to general instances of eating small amounts of food. Also, 'stressful' is an adjective describing a situation, but here the feeling is 'stressed'. 'A busy day' is more natural than 'the busy day'. 'Call' is incorrect; the intended word is 'calm'. 'I in the busy day' lacks the verb 'am'. The phrase 'help me to more relax' should be 'help me to relax more' for correct word order.

× I'm not entirely sure that because it's really rely on the what food we will eat.

✓ I'm not entirely sure because it really depends on what food we eat.

The phrase 'it's really rely' is incorrect; the correct modal verb usage is 'it really depends'. Also, 'the what food' is incorrect; it should be 'what food'. The modal verb 'will' is unnecessary here because the statement is general.

× For example, if we eat like fruits or nuts, I think it's give a quick energy boost and help me to stay focused and it's healthy food.

✓ For example, if we eat fruits or nuts, I think they give a quick energy boost, help me to stay focused, and are healthy foods.

'Eat like fruits or nuts' is incorrect; 'like' should be removed. 'It's give' is incorrect; the subject 'fruits or nuts' is plural, so the verb should be 'they give'. Also, 'it's healthy food' should be plural 'they are healthy foods' to agree with plural subject.

× When I was young, yes. When I was young, yes. I consistently. It's never. And I really like sweet snack, but however eating too many sugary or processed snack can be unhelpful for me so I'm not really.

✓ When I was young, yes. I consistently ate snacks. I really liked sweet snacks, but eating too many sugary or processed snacks can be unhelpful for me, so I don't really eat them now.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'I consistently' lacks a verb; it should be 'I consistently ate snacks' in past tense. 'It's never' is incomplete and unclear, so removed. 'I really like sweet snack' should be past tense 'liked' and plural 'snacks'. 'Eating too many sugary or processed snack' should be plural 'snacks'. The phrase 'so I'm not really' is incomplete; clarified as 'so I don't really eat them now'.

× I typically always consume food that I think it's helpful my body, so for the snack I just eat mostly fruits like banana, dragon fruit, avocado that's canmore beneficial for my body.

✓ I typically consume food that I think is helpful for my body, so for snacks I mostly eat fruits like bananas, dragon fruit, and avocado that can be more beneficial for my body.

'I typically always' is redundant; 'typically' alone suffices. 'It's helpful my body' is incorrect; should be 'is helpful for my body'. 'For the snack' should be plural 'for snacks'. 'Banana' should be plural 'bananas' to match 'fruits'. 'That's canmore' is incorrect; should be 'that can be more'.