Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but can be improved by correcting the spelling of 'fritters' and by adding a linking word to connect your current habit with your past preference. Also, try to avoid redundancy and keep the answer concise.

例: I usually eat snacks when it is raining outside because I find it comforting. For example, I used to enjoy fritters, which are my favorite snack.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and better sentence structure. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and avoid contradictions by explaining your occasional snack consumption more clearly.

例: No, I don't think snacks are healthy because they are usually junk food. However, I occasionally eat them, about once every fortnight, to satisfy my cravings without affecting my diet too much.

提案: Your answer needs grammatical correction and more specific details. Use correct expressions like 'when I was a child' and add linking words to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child. For instance, I used to enjoy momos and spring rolls, which were my favorite treats.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using plural forms correctly and adding more variety in vocabulary. Also, try to combine your ideas smoothly using appropriate linking words.

例: I prefer eating fritters whenever it rains outside. Additionally, I enjoy having spring rolls and momos as my favorite snacks.

× I eat snacks whenever it is raining outside.

✓ I eat snacks whenever it rains outside.

The verb 'rain' in this context should be in the simple present tense to indicate a habitual action, not the present continuous form 'is raining'. Using 'rains' correctly expresses the general condition under which the action happens.

× I think that snacks are type of junk food and I avoid it but I eat every fortnight to balance my diet.

✓ I think that snacks are a type of junk food and I avoid them but I eat them every fortnight to balance my diet.

The phrase 'type of junk food' requires the article 'a' before 'type' because 'type' is singular. Also, 'snacks' is plural, so the pronoun referring to it should be 'them' instead of 'it' to maintain agreement in number.

× Yes, snacks were my favorite when I was childhood.

✓ Yes, snacks were my favorite when I was a child.

The word 'childhood' is a noun referring to the period of being a child, but here the correct expression is 'when I was a child' to indicate the person at that time. Also, 'child' requires the article 'a'.

× I used to eat momos and spring roll.

✓ I used to eat momos and spring rolls.

Since 'momos' is plural, 'spring roll' should also be pluralized to 'spring rolls' to maintain parallel structure and correct plural form.

× Moreover, I also like to have spring roll and momos.

✓ Moreover, I also like to have spring rolls and momos.

The noun 'spring roll' should be pluralized to 'spring rolls' to match the plural form of 'momos' and to correctly refer to the snack in general.