Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Instead of saying "the snacks," simply say "snacks." Also, try to avoid redundancy by choosing either "before dinner" or "after dinner" if you usually eat snacks at one specific time, or mention both clearly with linking words if you eat snacks at both times.

例: I usually eat snacks either before or after dinner, depending on how hungry I feel.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. You should directly answer the question with a clear opinion and explanation. Use simple and correct sentence structures to express your thoughts.

例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fat.

提案: Your answer has tense inconsistency. Since you are talking about the past, use the past tense consistently. Also, you can add a little detail to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially after school.

提案: Your answer lists snacks but lacks coherence and has grammatical errors. Try to organise your answer better, use singular/plural correctly, and explain your preferences clearly with linking words.

例: I like to eat a variety of snacks such as chocolate, potato chips, candy, and biscuits. I especially enjoy green tea-flavoured snacks, but I also like the original flavours.

× I usually eat the snacks before dinner or after dinner time.

✓ I usually eat snacks before or after dinner.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'snacks' when speaking generally. Also, 'after dinner time' is redundant; 'after dinner' is sufficient and more natural.

× Are things is not healthy for me to eat snacks?

✓ It is not healthy for me to eat snacks.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary words. The correct structure is 'It is not healthy for me to eat snacks.' This corrects the sentence structure and makes it grammatically correct.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young.

The verb 'eat' should be in the past tense 'ate' to match the past time reference 'when I was young.' Using present tense 'eat' with a past time frame is incorrect.

× I like to eat chocolate, potato chips, candy, biscuits, a lot of things.

✓ I like to eat chocolate, potato chips, candy, biscuits, and many other things.

The phrase 'a lot of things' is vague and informal. Using 'many other things' is more appropriate and clear in this context.

× If it's a green tea flavors or just original flavors, I most enjoy it that.

✓ If they are green tea flavor or just original flavor, I enjoy them the most.

The pronouns and noun forms are incorrect. 'Flavors' is plural, so 'they' should be used instead of 'it.' Also, 'most enjoy it that' is ungrammatical; the correct phrase is 'enjoy them the most.'