Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid repeating words like 'always'. Also, add linking words to improve coherence. For example, you can say, "I usually eat snacks with my friends at school during snack time because they often bring snacks, so everyone gets to share."

例: I usually eat snacks with my friends at school during snack time because they often bring snacks, so everyone gets to share.

提案: Avoid informal phrases like 'gonna' and repetition of ideas. Use linking words to connect your points clearly. For example, "I think eating snacks in moderation is okay because they contain a lot of sugar; however, eating too much sugar can lead to diabetes, which I want to avoid."

例: I think eating snacks in moderation is okay because they contain a lot of sugar; however, eating too much sugar can lead to diabetes, which I want to avoid.

提案: Try to avoid repeating 'the only thing' and use more precise language. Also, link your sentences for better flow. For example, "I don't really remember much, but when I was about 4 years old, I usually ate milk and chocolate as snacks."

例: I don't really remember much, but when I was about 4 years old, I usually ate milk and chocolate as snacks.

提案: Provide a more specific answer with examples and avoid vague phrases like 'I don't know'. For instance, "I like to eat various snacks such as chips, fruit, and cookies because they taste good and are easy to share with friends."

例: I like to eat various snacks such as chips, fruit, and cookies because they taste good and are easy to share with friends.

× Not too much because snacks contain a lot of sugar, and if we eat too much sugar, we're gonna get diabetes, and I do not want to get diabetes.

✓ Not too much because snacks contain a lot of sugar, and if we eat too much sugar, we will get diabetes, and I do not want to get diabetes.

The phrase 'we're gonna get diabetes' is informal and uses 'gonna' which is a colloquial contraction of 'going to'. In formal grammar, especially in speaking tests, it is better to use 'will' to indicate future tense. 'Will' is the correct modal verb for future predictions or consequences.

× The only thing that I usually ate is just milk and chocolate.

✓ The only things that I usually ate were just milk and chocolate.

The sentence has a singular subject 'thing' but refers to two items 'milk and chocolate', which is plural. Therefore, the subject should be plural 'things' and the verb should be in past plural form 'were' to agree with the plural subject. This corrects the singular and plural mismatch and past tense agreement.