Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are minor grammatical errors such as "starting" instead of "start" and slight awkward phrasing. Also, try to use linking words like "so" or "therefore" to connect ideas smoothly. Keep your sentences concise and avoid redundancy.

例: I usually eat snacks in the late afternoon, around 4 or 5 PM, when I start feeling a bit hungry before dinner. Therefore, I often have some fruit or nuts because they are healthy and provide enough energy to stay focused until my next meal. This routine helps me avoid overeating during dinner.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences, such as "are opting" which should be "I opt" or "one opts". Also, use linking words like "because" or "however" properly to improve coherence. Try to be more specific and avoid vague phrases like "essential nutritions"; instead, say "essential nutrients."

例: Yes, I believe eating snacks can be healthy if chosen wisely. For example, I usually opt for fruits or nuts instead of sugary or fried snacks because they provide essential nutrients and energy between meals. However, moderation is the key to avoid excessive calorie intake.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured with relevant examples. To improve, you could add linking words like "especially" or "because" to enhance coherence. Also, watch for minor spacing issues like "play time" which is usually one word "playtime."

例: Yes, I used to eat snacks quite often when I was young. For example, I would frequently have chips or cookies after school because they were convenient and tasty. Snacking was a regular part of my daily routine, especially during playtime with friends.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical errors such as "a varieties" instead of "a variety" and incomplete sentences like the last one ending abruptly. Also, use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas. Try to complete your thoughts fully and avoid redundancy.

例: I enjoy eating a variety of snacks, but my favorite has to be fruits, especially apples and bananas. They are not only delicious but also healthy, providing essential vitamins and energy. For example, I often choose fruit over sugary snacks because it helps me stay refreshed and maintain my energy levels.

× I usually eat snacks in the late afternoon around 4:00 or 5:00 PM when I starting feeling a bit hungry before dinner.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the late afternoon around 4:00 or 5:00 PM when I start feeling a bit hungry before dinner.

The verb 'starting' is incorrectly used here. After 'when I', the base form of the verb with 'start' should be used in the present tense as 'start feeling' to indicate a habitual action. Using 'starting' (present participle) is incorrect in this context.

× For example, are opting for fruits or nuts instead of sugary or fried.

✓ For example, I am opting for fruits or nuts instead of sugary or fried snacks.

The sentence lacks a subject pronoun before 'are opting'. The correct subject 'I' is needed to form a proper sentence. Also, the phrase 'sugary or fried' is incomplete and should be followed by a noun like 'snacks'.

× Snacks provide essential nutritions and energy between meals.

✓ Snacks provide essential nutrition and energy between meals.

The word 'nutritions' is incorrect because 'nutrition' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Using 'nutrition' in singular form is correct here.

× However, moderation is the key to avoid excessive calories intake.

✓ However, moderation is the key to avoid excessive calorie intake.

The phrase 'calories intake' is incorrect. 'Calorie' should be singular as it is used as an adjective modifying 'intake'. Also, 'intake' is uncountable here, so 'calorie intake' is the correct form.

× I enjoy eating a varieties of snacks, but my favorite food I have to be fruits, especially apple and bananas.

✓ I enjoy eating a variety of snacks, but my favorite foods have to be fruits, especially apples and bananas.

'Varieties' should be singular 'variety' after 'a'. 'Favorite food' should be plural 'favorite foods' because multiple fruits are mentioned. Also, 'apple' should be plural 'apples' to match 'bananas' and indicate more than one.

× For example, I often choose fruit over sugar snacks because it helps me stay refreshed and.

✓ For example, I often choose fruit over sugary snacks because it helps me stay refreshed.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' which is incomplete. Also, 'sugar snacks' is incorrect; the adjective form 'sugary snacks' is appropriate. The corrected sentence removes 'and' and uses 'sugary' to complete the thought properly.