Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid mispronunciations and incorrect word usage, such as 'snakes' instead of 'snacks'. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat snacks in the morning and evening because they give me some energy throughout the day.

提案: Avoid repetition and hesitations. Provide clearer reasons and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Try to be more specific about why you eat snacks despite knowing they are unhealthy.

例: Although I know snacks are not very healthy, I often eat them because they are tempting and sometimes there are no healthier options available nearby.

提案: Use correct verb tenses and avoid unnecessary repetition. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Be more specific about your habits and your mother's advice.

例: Yes, when I was a teenager, I often ate biscuits and chips. However, my mom told me these snacks were unhealthy, but I still ate them because I liked them.

提案: Avoid grammatical errors and hesitations. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you like these snacks. Keep your answer concise and natural.

例: I like eating snacks such as vada pav, burgers, pizza, and sandwiches because they taste good and help me relax after a long day.

× Yes, I do eat snakes.

✓ Yes, I do eat snacks.

The student mistakenly said 'snakes' instead of 'snacks'. This is a vocabulary error, not a grammar problem, so no correction under the grammar problem list is needed here.

× Yes, I do eat snakes.

✓ Yes, I do eat snacks.

The word 'snakes' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'snacks'. This is a vocabulary error, not a grammar error, so no grammar problem type applies.

× I I prefer to eat snakes during the evening time as well as in the morning time as it gives me some energy.

✓ I prefer to eat snacks during the evening as well as in the morning because it gives me some energy.

The student repeated 'I' unnecessarily and used 'snakes' instead of 'snacks'. Also, 'during the evening time' and 'in the morning time' are wordy; 'during the evening' and 'in the morning' are more natural. 'Because' is better than 'as' here to express reason clearly.

× Well, I know it is not healthy to eat snacks, but uh, due to the tempting, due to the tempting nature of myself, I prefer to eat that and also there is no other food available in the market, so I eat snacks.

✓ Well, I know it is not healthy to eat snacks, but due to my tempting nature, I prefer to eat them, and also there is no other food available in the market, so I eat snacks.

The phrase 'due to the tempting, due to the tempting nature of myself' is awkward and repetitive. 'Due to my tempting nature' is clearer. Also, 'eat that' should be 'eat them' to refer to snacks (plural).

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young, in my teenage, when I was a teenager, I usually eat uh, biscuits and chips.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, in my teenage years, when I was a teenager, I usually ate biscuits and chips.

The student mixed present tense 'eat' with past time references 'when I was young'. The verbs should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame.

× However, my mom told me that uh, this was not healthy, but due to my, uh, due to my nature, I eat.

✓ However, my mom told me that this was not healthy, but due to my nature, I ate them.

The verb 'eat' is in present tense but the context is past. It should be 'ate' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'them' clarifies the object (snacks).

× I like to eat vada pav, burger, pizza, sandwiches and many other things.

✓ I like to eat vada pav, burgers, pizza, sandwiches and many other things.

'Burger' should be plural 'burgers' to be consistent with the list of multiple items. This is a singular and plural issue.

× I know that this those things are not good but I still ate eat them and it gives me a relaxing feeling when I eat them.

✓ I know that these things are not good but I still eat them and they give me a relaxing feeling when I eat them.

'This those things' is incorrect; 'these things' is correct. 'Ate' is past tense but the context is present, so 'eat' is correct. Also, 'it gives' should be 'they give' to agree with plural 'things'. This involves singular/plural and tense issues.