Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些语法错误和重复，比如“when I'm when I'm alone”。建议注意句子结构，避免重复，并使用连词使句子更流畅。可以将句子合并，表达更自然。

例: I usually eat snacks only on weekends when I watch TV with my boyfriend because during weekdays, when I'm alone at home, I try to be more self-disciplined and avoid eating snacks to stay healthy.

提案: 回答内容较好，但有些表达不够准确，如“high in calorie and grease”应为“high in calories and fat”。建议使用更准确的词汇，并注意句子连贯性。

例: Of course, eating snacks is not healthy because they are usually high in calories and fat. Moreover, they can be quite addictive, making it hard to stop once you start, so strong self-control is necessary.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，如“my parents, they educated me”和“So I so”。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用连词使表达更流畅。

例: No, I didn't eat snacks often when I was young because my parents taught me to maintain a healthy lifestyle, and snacking was not a common habit in our family, so they helped me develop good habits.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和不完整的句子，如“and I tried”。建议注意句子完整性，避免重复表达，并使用更丰富的词汇描述喜好。

例: Although I try to maintain a healthy lifestyle, I cannot resist chips because I really enjoy their salty taste, even though I know they are one of the unhealthiest snacks.

× During the weekdays when I'm when I'm alone at home.

✓ During the weekdays, when I'm alone at home,

The sentence is incomplete and has a repeated phrase 'when I'm'. It should be connected properly to the next sentence or completed to form a full sentence. Adding commas and removing repetition improves clarity and sentence structure.

× I'm more self-discipline.

✓ I'm more self-disciplined.

'Self-discipline' is a noun, but here an adjective is needed to describe 'I'. The correct adjective form is 'self-disciplined'. Using the adjective form correctly describes the subject.

× I try to stay healthy by avoid eating snacks.

✓ I try to stay healthy by avoiding eating snacks.

After the preposition 'by', the verb should be in the gerund (-ing) form. 'Avoid' should be changed to 'avoiding' to follow correct preposition usage.

× Snacks are normally high in calorie and grease, so they're very unhealthy food and more.

✓ Snacks are normally high in calories and grease, so they're very unhealthy foods and more.

'Calorie' should be plural 'calories' because it refers to a countable unit. Also, 'food' should be plural 'foods' to match the plural subject 'snacks'. This corrects singular/plural agreement.

× they can be really easily addicted.

✓ they can be really easily addictive.

'Addicted' is an adjective describing a person, but here the snack is the subject, so 'addictive' is the correct adjective to describe something that causes addiction.

× So when you first start it, it's kind of hard to stop.

✓ So when you first start eating them, it's kind of hard to stop.

The pronoun 'it' is vague here. Clarifying the object as 'eating them' improves sentence clarity and structure.

× my parents, they educated me to maintain a very healthy lifestyle

✓ my parents educated me to maintain a very healthy lifestyle

The pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'my parents'. Removing 'they' corrects the sentence structure.

× So I so they cultivated this good habit in me.

✓ So they cultivated this good habit in me.

The phrase 'So I so' is redundant and incorrect. Removing 'I so' corrects the sentence structure.

× I cannot resist chips, which is one of the most unhealthy snacks of all.

✓ I cannot resist chips, which are one of the most unhealthy snacks of all.

'Chips' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× But I just really liked it.

✓ But I just really like it.

The context is present preference, so present tense 'like' is appropriate instead of past tense 'liked'.