Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，时态不一致，且表达不够简洁自然。建议注意时态一致性，避免重复表达，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because I work or study hard in the morning. Therefore, I feel a bit tired and need a snack to relax.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，句子结构不完整。建议使用完整句子表达观点，并用连接词说明原因。

例: Yes, I think eating snacks can be healthy if I control the amount and choose nutritious options because this helps me maintain good health.

提案: 回答中时态错误较多，表达不自然且重复。建议注意时态一致，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: When I was young, I often ate snacks because I had a lot of free time and friends. Eating snacks together made us happy and strengthened our friendship.

提案: 回答中语法错误严重，句子不完整且表达不清。建议使用完整句子，注意主谓一致，并用连接词清晰表达原因。

例: I like to eat chocolate snacks because they taste delicious and have a unique flavor. Also, they help me stay awake when I feel sleepy.

× I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because in the morning I work or study very hard so I felt a little tired, so in the afternoon I can eat snacks for relax.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because in the morning I work or study very hard so I feel a little tired, so in the afternoon I can eat snacks to relax.

这里的时态应保持一致，描述习惯动作时应使用一般现在时，不能用过去时felt。

× so in the afternoon I can eat snacks for relax.

✓ so in the afternoon I can eat snacks to relax.

动词不定式to relax用来表示目的，不能用for relax。

× Yes, I think it is healthy for me to eat snacks as long as I can make a plan for me to take control of it. Which can keep me healthy?

✓ Yes, I think it is healthy for me to eat snacks as long as I can make a plan to take control of it, which can keep me healthy.

句子中“Which can keep me healthy?”是一个不完整的句子，应与前句合并，形成完整句子。

× When I were young, I often eat snacks.

✓ When I was young, I often ate snacks.

主语是第一人称单数，过去时态应使用was，动词eat的过去式是ate。

× When I were young, I often eat snacks.

✓ When I was young, I often ate snacks.

描述过去习惯动作应使用过去时态，不能用一般现在时。

× It's due to my much free time and friends.

✓ It's due to my much free time and friends.

“much”用于不可数名词，free time是不可数名词，friends是可数复数名词，前面应使用“many”修饰friends。应改为："It's due to my much free time and many friends."

× We can eat eat snacks for happiness and which can make our friendship longer and longer.

✓ We can eat snacks for happiness, which can make our friendship longer and longer.

句中“which”指代前面的内容，应用逗号连接，且“eat eat”重复，应删除一个“eat”。

× I like eat chocolate snacks because it is very delicious and which have a unique taste for me and it can also let me not feel sleep and.

✓ I like to eat chocolate snacks because they are very delicious and have a unique taste for me, and they can also help me not feel sleepy.

“chocolate snacks”是复数，代词应使用“they”，动词应与复数主语一致；“like eat”应为“like to eat”；“let me not feel sleep”表达不正确，应改为“help me not feel sleepy”。