Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and complete your sentences fully to make your answer more natural and effective. Also, ensure your answer is complete and coherent without abrupt endings.

例: I usually eat snacks around midday because they help me stay energized and focused. For example, I often choose fruits or nuts, which provide energy without making me feel too full.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity by avoiding awkward phrasing like 'prevent our sugar level to increase other critical levels.' Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I believe eating snacks like fruits or nuts is beneficial because they help maintain energy levels and keep blood sugar stable, which is important for overall health.

提案: Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to organize your answer logically and make it easier to follow.

例: Yes, when I was young, we often ate snacks during the day, especially at school. For example, we usually had bread and cheese or fruits, which were healthy. Occasionally, we also enjoyed chocolates and cakes as treats.

提案: Clarify your vocabulary (e.g., 'not swear' is unclear) and avoid filler words. Use precise words and complete sentences to express your ideas clearly.

例: I personally prefer to eat snacks that are not sweet because they provide enough energy and are healthy. For instance, I choose nuts or fruits since they are low in fat and salt, which can be harmful to health.

× Uh, This way I may maintain my.

✓ This way I may maintain my energy.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Adding the noun 'energy' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Yes, I think that it's beneficial for us to eat snacks such as fruits or nuts because it can maintain our energy and prevent our sugar level to increase other critical levels.

✓ Yes, I think that it's beneficial for us to eat snacks such as fruits or nuts because it can maintain our energy and prevent our sugar level from increasing other critical levels.

The verb 'prevent' is followed by 'from' plus the gerund form of the verb. The original sentence incorrectly uses 'to increase' instead of 'from increasing'.

× Yes, when we were young we eat snacks during the day and when we were at school, for example, we had a a bread and cheese snack with us and fruits which were healthy and during some occasions we could have chocolates and cakes.

✓ Yes, when we were young we ate snacks during the day and when we were at school, for example, we had a bread and cheese snack with us and fruits which were healthy and during some occasions we could have chocolates and cakes.

The sentence refers to past events, so the verb 'eat' should be in the past tense 'ate' to maintain tense consistency.

× I personally prefer to have not swear with me uh, because it it not only give me uh, enough energy, but also uh, it's healthy and lacks umm, fat and salt which harms our health.

✓ I personally prefer not to have sweets with me, uh, because it not only gives me, uh, enough energy, but also, uh, it's healthy and lacks, umm, fat and salt which harm our health.

The word 'swear' is incorrect here; the intended word is likely 'sweets'. Also, 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Additionally, 'harms' should be 'harm' because it refers to plural nouns 'fat and salt'.