Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and express your ideas more clearly and naturally. Also, instead of saying 'I think it's disgusting,' you could use a more polite or descriptive phrase to sound more natural. Try to keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: I usually eat snacks after school because the food at my school isn't very tasty, so I prefer to have something else to eat.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains filler words like 'uh.' Try to directly answer the question and provide clear reasons. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because I have many classes and limited time, so I try to eat nutritious meals instead.

提案: Remember to use the correct past tense ('ate' instead of 'eat'). Also, avoid vague phrases like 'something like this' and try to be more specific. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: When I was young, I ate snacks every day because I loved treats like chips and chocolate.

提案: Try to use more precise vocabulary instead of 'fave' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, avoid repeating ideas and use linking words to connect your thoughts smoothly.

例: I like to eat chocolate and potato snacks because they are my favorites, and my mom used to give me these snacks when I was a child.

× When I was young I eat snacks every day because I love snacks very much, like chips or chocolate.

✓ When I was young I ate snacks every day because I loved snacks very much, like chips or chocolate.

The sentence describes past habits, so the verbs should be in the past tense. 'Eat' and 'love' should be changed to 'ate' and 'loved' respectively to match the past time frame indicated by 'When I was young'.