Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复表达，注意语法和用词准确性。例如，“a lot of different kind of snacks”应为“a lot of different kinds of snacks”。此外，回答可以更简洁自然，避免冗长。

例: I usually eat snacks whenever I feel hungry. For example, I often have some chips or fruit while watching TV or relaxing at home.

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，如“the the tastiness”和“when I feel like I want to eat it”。建议简化句子结构，使用连词使表达更流畅。

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fat. However, I sometimes eat them because they taste good and satisfy my cravings.

提案: 回答中时态使用不准确，如“I seldom eat snacks”应为过去时。建议注意时态一致性，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: No, I rarely ate snacks when I was young because my parents were very strict and didn't allow me to eat them without permission. But now, I can enjoy snacks whenever I want.

提案: 回答中有口语填充词“uh”，应避免。建议使用更准确的词汇，并简化表达，避免重复“because”。

例: I enjoy many snacks, such as Super Rings, Chisels, and a snack called Roller Coaster. I especially like the cheese-flavored ones because of their salty taste.

× I eat a lot of different kind of snacks that I can find in my house.

✓ I eat a lot of different kinds of snacks that I can find in my house.

这里的“kind”应该用复数形式“kinds”，因为前面有“a lot of different”，表示多种多样的种类。

× Sometimes I eat it when I'm watching the TV pro program and sometimes I eat it just to spend my time.

✓ Sometimes I eat them when I'm watching the TV program and sometimes I eat just to pass the time.

“snacks”是复数，代词应使用“them”而不是“it”。另外，“pro program”应为“program”，“spend my time”表达不自然，改为“pass the time”更合适。

× but I still can't resist the the tastiness of the snacks and I always feel like eating it when I feel like I want to eat it.

✓ but I still can't resist the tastiness of the snacks and I always feel like eating them when I want to eat.

“snacks”是复数，代词应使用“them”而不是“it”。句子中“feel like I want to eat it”重复且不自然，简化为“when I want to eat”更流畅。

× No, I seldom eat snacks because my parents are very strict, they don't allow me to eat snacks without their permission. So I think I don't really eat snacks when I was a child.

✓ No, I seldom ate snacks because my parents were very strict; they didn't allow me to eat snacks without their permission. So I think I didn't really eat snacks when I was a child.

描述过去的习惯和状态时，动词应使用过去时态，如“ate”、“were”、“didn't”。

× There's a lot of snacks that I like to eat.

✓ There are a lot of snacks that I like to eat.

“snacks”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”而不是“is”。

× especially with the cheese flavours because I really like cheese because of the saltiness.

✓ especially with the cheese flavors because I really like cheese for its saltiness.

“because of the saltiness”表达不够自然，改为“for its saltiness”更符合英语习惯。