Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "I would usually" and "I would like eating it". Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat snacks after school, around 3 to 4 pm. I enjoy having them with drinks like hot chocolate or Milo, which makes the snack time more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast ideas.

例: I think my snack choices are mostly unhealthy because I often eat chips. However, sometimes I choose healthier options like freeze-dried fruits or fresh fruits.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes, making it difficult to understand. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and provide specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences.

例: When I was young, I didn't often eat snacks because I didn't like them much. However, when my friends came over, I would buy some snacks to share with them at my home.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid repetition and use linking words to list your preferences clearly.

例: I like to eat chips and freeze-dried fruits, such as mango and apple, because they are tasty and convenient.

× I would like eating it with some drinks like hot chocolate or Milo.

✓ I would like to eat it with some drinks like hot chocolate or Milo.

The verb 'like' is typically followed by the infinitive form 'to eat' rather than the gerund 'eating' in this context. Using 'to eat' is more appropriate when expressing preference or desire.

× So I personally think what snacks I eat it's quite unhealthy 'cause I eat chips and sometimes I would eat some healthy ones like free dried fruits and maybe some fruits.

✓ So I personally think the snacks I eat are quite unhealthy because I eat chips and sometimes I eat some healthy ones like freeze dried fruits and maybe some fruits.

The phrase 'what snacks I eat it's' is incorrect; it should be 'the snacks I eat are' to correctly refer to the subject and verb agreement. Also, 'free dried fruits' is a misspelling of 'freeze dried fruits'. The word 'because' is preferred over the informal ''cause' in formal speech.

× What my friends is uh, coming?

✓ When my friends are, uh, coming?

The original sentence has subject-verb disagreement and unclear structure. 'My friends' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'When' clarifies the intended meaning.

× I would buy some tracks to share with them one day at my home.

✓ I would buy some snacks to share with them one day at my home.

The word 'tracks' is likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'snacks'. Correcting it to 'snacks' fits the context and meaning of the sentence.

× So I like to eat chips of free dried fruits like freeze dried mango and freeze dried apples.

✓ So I like to eat chips or freeze dried fruits like freeze dried mango and freeze dried apples.

The preposition 'of' is incorrect here; 'or' is appropriate to list alternatives. Also, 'free dried' should be 'freeze dried' to correctly describe the type of fruits.