Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more concise by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and ensure your sentences are natural and easy to understand.

例: I usually eat snacks in the morning, such as homemade fruits and a cup of coffee. I find this combination healthy and easy to prepare, and it helps me feel relaxed and energized.

提案: Focus on clarity and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to organize your answer logically and choose vocabulary that fits the context naturally.

例: Yes, I believe eating a healthy breakfast is important because it energizes me and helps me stay confident throughout the day, allowing me to work effectively.

提案: Improve your grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Provide specific details and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. My mother usually prepared them at home because she preferred us not to eat outside. We loved her homemade snacks because they were fresh and healthy.

提案: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use appropriate linking words and avoid awkward phrases like "boost off my concentration."

例: I like to eat healthy snacks such as nutritious juice, fresh fruits, and bread. Additionally, a good cup of coffee helps me feel energized and improves my concentration throughout the day.

× Right now I usually eat homemade breakfast like fruits or any pretty coffee which I find it really healthy and easy to make it and it also helps me healthy and more relaxed.

✓ Right now I usually eat homemade breakfast like fruits or any pretty coffee which I find really healthy and easy to make, and it also helps me stay healthy and more relaxed.

The phrase 'helps me healthy' is incorrect because 'help' should be followed by a verb in the base form or 'to' + verb. Here, 'healthy' is an adjective, so it should be 'helps me stay healthy' to indicate the action of maintaining health.

× Yes, when I was young I mostly eat snacks and my mom used to make it and we used to love it because my mom never allowed to go out and have a breakfast of the people of outside.

✓ Yes, when I was young I mostly ate snacks and my mom used to make them and we used to love them because my mom never allowed us to go out and have breakfast from outside people.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame 'when I was young'. Also, 'make it' and 'love it' should be plural 'make them' and 'love them' to agree with 'snacks'. The phrase 'never allowed to go out' is missing the object 'us'. 'Have a breakfast of the people of outside' is awkward; it should be 'have breakfast from outside people' or 'eat breakfast outside'.

× She always makes it by her hand and which is more.

✓ She always makes it by hand, and that's even better.

The phrase 'by her hand' is unnatural; the correct expression is 'by hand'. The phrase 'which is more' is unclear and ungrammatical; it is better replaced with 'that's even better' to convey the intended meaning.