Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Try to give a direct and concise response with correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid filler words and clarify the frequency clearly. For example, say "I usually eat snacks two or three times a week, especially during my period when I tend to snack more."

例: I usually eat snacks two or three times a week, especially during my period when I tend to snack more.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contradictory. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, "I don't think eating snacks is very healthy, but if I eat them only once or twice a week, it shouldn't be a problem."

例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy, but if I eat them only once or twice a week, it shouldn't be a problem.

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammar mistakes and repetition. Use past tense consistently and avoid repeating the same words. For example, "Yes, I loved snacks when I was a child, especially chocolates and candies. I used to eat them quite often because I enjoyed their sweet taste."

例: Yes, I loved snacks when I was a child, especially chocolates and candies. I used to eat them quite often because I enjoyed their sweet taste.

提案: Your answer is short and contains hesitations. Try to give a fuller response with reasons or examples, and avoid filler words. For example, "I like eating chocolates and candies because they are sweet and satisfying. I've enjoyed them since I was a child."

例: I like eating chocolates and candies because they are sweet and satisfying. I've enjoyed them since I was a child.

× I usually, umm, one or three times of per week

✓ I usually eat snacks one to three times per week

The phrase 'one or three times of per week' is incorrect because 'of' is unnecessary and the quantifier is awkward. The correct expression is 'one to three times per week' to indicate frequency clearly.

× I always eat snakes and, uh, in my period I always eat snakes and it's one or two day per day

✓ I always eat snacks, and during my period I eat snacks one or two times per day

The word 'snakes' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'snacks'. Also, 'in my period' should be 'during my period' to correctly express time. 'One or two day per day' is incorrect; it should be 'one or two times per day' to indicate frequency.

× sometimes it's snakes

✓ sometimes it's snacks

The word 'snakes' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'snacks'. This is a vocabulary error rather than grammar, but it affects clarity.

× Did you often eat snacks when you were young? Actually, yes, I love snakes in my childhood

✓ Actually, yes, I loved snacks in my childhood

The question is in the past tense, so the answer should also be in the past tense. 'Love' should be changed to 'loved' to maintain tense consistency.

× I always eat candies and chocolates, I love them

✓ I always ate candies and chocolates; I loved them

Since the context is about childhood, past tense should be used: 'ate' and 'loved' instead of 'eat' and 'love'. Also, a semicolon or conjunction is needed to connect the two clauses properly.