Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "some craving of eating"; instead, say "I usually have cravings in the evening after work." Also, try to use linking words to improve flow.

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening when I get home from work because I often have cravings at that time.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like "uh" and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about what makes your snacks healthy.

例: Yes, I think eating snacks is healthy for me because I choose nutritious options like fruits and nuts instead of fried foods, which satisfy my cravings without harming my health.

提案: There are grammatical errors and unclear phrases like "oftenly" and "after some differences." Use correct adverbs and clearer explanations. Also, add linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because children usually have frequent cravings, so it's necessary to eat small meals between main meals.

提案: Your answer is good but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. For example, say "I enjoy snacks such as oats and dried fruits because they keep me energetic."

例: I enjoy snacks such as oats and dried fruits because they provide me with energy and are healthy options.

× I usually eat snacks in the evening when I reach home after work because that time I have some craving of eating.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening when I reach home after work because at that time I have some cravings to eat.

The phrase 'some craving of eating' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'some cravings to eat' or 'a craving for food'. Also, 'that time' should be 'at that time' to correctly use the preposition for time expressions.

× Actually it, it is healthy for me because I eat, uh, healthy snacks.

✓ Actually, it is healthy for me because I eat healthy snacks.

The sentence has an unnecessary comma and repeated 'it'. Removing the extra 'it' and comma improves clarity and correctness.

× Uh, I don't eat fry things.

✓ Uh, I don't eat fried things.

The adjective 'fry' is incorrect here; the correct past participle adjective is 'fried' to describe food that has been cooked by frying.

× That's why it's, uh, very healthy.

✓ That's why it's, uh, very healthy.

No correction needed for this sentence.

× Yes, I oftenly ate snacks when I was young because in young age we have a lot of craving of eating, so it's necessary to take some meals after some differences.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because at a young age we had a lot of cravings to eat, so it's necessary to have some meals at different times.

The adverb 'oftenly' is incorrect; the correct form is 'often'. 'In young age' should be 'at a young age'. 'Craving of eating' should be 'cravings to eat'. 'Take some meals after some differences' is unclear; 'have some meals at different times' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I like to eat the snacks like oats and some dry fruits which keeps me energetic.

✓ I like to eat snacks like oats and some dry fruits which keep me energetic.

'The snacks' is unnecessary; 'snacks' is sufficient. 'Dry fruits' is plural, so the verb should be 'keep' instead of 'keeps' to agree with the plural subject.