Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，例如将"snacks"误说成"snake"，且句子结构不完整。建议注意时态一致性，使用正确的词汇，并且回答时尽量简洁自然。

例: I usually eat snacks like sweets or chocolate in the afternoon because they make me feel happy.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如"it's snacks is"，且表达重复。建议使用更准确的句子结构，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I think snacks are unhealthy, but I often eat chocolate or sweets when I feel upset because they cheer me up.

提案: 句子中缺少动词不定式的"to"，且表达不够流畅。建议注意语法结构，使用连接词使句子更自然。

例: When I was young, my parents didn't want me to eat too many snacks because they contain a lot of sugar and fat, which is unhealthy for my body.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇"I I"，且句子结构不够自然。建议避免重复，使用更地道的表达方式。

例: I like eating snacks such as chocolate, sweets, and chips, which I can easily buy at convenience stores.

× I ate snake every day.

✓ I eat snacks every day.

这里的时间状语是“now”，表示现在的习惯动作，应该用一般现在时，而不是过去时。

× I like eat sweets or chocolate, it can make me feel happy.

✓ I like eating sweets or chocolate; they can make me feel happy.

动词like后面应接动名词形式（-ing），而不是动词原形。句子中两个独立分句应使用分号或句号分开。

× I think it's snacks is unhealthy but when I feel upset I usually eat snacks, especially chocolate or sweets.

✓ I think snacks are unhealthy, but when I feel upset, I usually eat snacks, especially chocolate or sweets.

snacks是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式are，而不是is。

× It can make me cheer me up.

✓ It can cheer me up.

句子中“make me cheer me up”重复使用了宾语和动词，应简化为“It can cheer me up”。

× my parents didn't want me eat too many snacks because it contained a lot of sugar or fats is unhealthy for my body.

✓ My parents didn't want me to eat too many snacks because they contain a lot of sugar and fat, which is unhealthy for my body.

动词want后接动词不定式，需加to。且句子中“it contained a lot of sugar or fats is unhealthy”结构混乱，应拆分为两句或用定语从句。

× my parents didn't want me eat too many snacks because it contained a lot of sugar or fats is unhealthy for my body.

✓ My parents didn't want me to eat too many snacks because they contain a lot of sugar and fat, which is unhealthy for my body.

snacks为复数，指代时应使用复数代词they。sugar和fat通常不可数，且用and连接。

× I like to eat snacks such as chocolate or sweets or chips.

✓ I like to eat snacks such as chocolate, sweets, or chips.

列举多个名词时应使用逗号分隔，且or前应加逗号。

× I I could buy this in convenient stores.

✓ I can buy these in convenience stores.

重复使用“I I”是错误，且“this”指代不明确，应使用复数“these”。“convenient stores”应为“convenience stores”。